Review Detail of Toni_Yunanto in In A Fantasy World: Pioneer Of Mana In The Apocalypse

I would suggest you consider breaking up the text into smaller paragraphs for easier reading. Additionally, you may want to consider adding more descriptive language to help paint a clearer picture for the reader. For example, you could describe the appearance of the stars, the colors of the civilizations, and the emotions of the characters. Here is a possible rewrite of the passage with these suggestions: In the myths of many ever expanding universes, the boundless void becomes the vast sky. Only the stars call the silent universe, warmth we all live beneath. They twinkle like diamonds in the endless night, each one a beacon of hope and wonder. Hope and darkness we all call the planets civilization. Amidst this unexplained emptiness, different colors to all civilizations, despite their despairing frame. Some are bright and vibrant, others are dull and faded. Each one reflects the mood and culture of its inhabitants.