Review Detail of QuinnKey in This is no longer a book anymore

This is my honest review. First of all, I'm really not into Korean drama, so I didn't get what "omma" means. There's a lot of problem in your paragraphs: quotation, spacing, punctuation, and breaks (this is how I write my current novel at first), so I advise you to re-read it again. 2nd, characters.. Dal Hae first, I couldn't feel a strong aura around her; she feels like an NPC that has a little dialogue with her. I felt she's not the protagonist and worthless to the story. Edit her personality to make a big impact for us readers to remember. Grandma Choi is grandma Choi; she's old, and she's okay to me; there's no need to change about her. I felt she's like the other grandmas in K-drama and her family, just like the K-drama characters that we watch every time, the same vibe, no noticing feature. Overall, there's something I want you to show us readers, but I couldn't pinpoint it because I'm not into dramas. But hey, this is my honest review, so I hope it can help you.