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RegalObscure
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1.)A child of Senju and Uchiha that is enough to f- up everything unless he is taken to root or stolen by Orochimaru. He must be taken to root even without chakra and Zetsu would taken him during his birth maybe taken his mom before birth. 2) Senju clan and the name Senju was disbanded. I have no idea how so much OC Senju is popping up. 3) Transforming MC's clone to chakra metal sword by transformation justu? Hold up, wait a minute, something isn't right. 4) Chapters are too short and lack depth. 5) Dialogue is somewhat lifeless and low quality a.i - ish. 6) Pace is slow, too slow. you can easily skim and skip most of the chapter as far as I've read. 3-6 chapter can easily be condensed to one chapter. ************Writing Quality 3. Story Development 2. Character Design 2, Updating Stability 5, World Background 2. Writer-san your chapters are too short yet filled up with water and pace of story is too slow. MC is extremely naive to the point of being unlikeable also a little bit of pushover not an endearing quality in any kind of MC. OG Naruto has many plot holes, but your story started with a plot hole Senju father with enormous pool of chakra and contradiction Uchiha mother. Anyway with best wishes to you and your story ( At least you had the balls to write and publish you ff). Bye have fun and live happily.

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Naruto: Chronicles of a Fire Ninja

FirstHokage

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FirstHokage
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buddy you had written way too many questions including those in various chapters, and these are some common questions I will write a chapter (chapter 0) answering those questions also I hope my next work may be upto your standards 😊

RegalObscure
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To those who cry and bring hell about grammar. Dude we have fluently read mtlnovel.