Review Detail of YaBoyChris in Dragon Ball Alternative

Equuleus_Nox:Hey, thanks for taking the time to review! I'm sorry to hear that this story is no longer enjoyable for you. I apologize as the author! I completely understand that certain types of goofiness or characterizations isn't for everyone, and you are correct in that too much of it can ruin a fiction. I'm quite aware of that fact! DBA, at the time of this review, hasn't really hit its stride yet in terms of plot. At the beginning, it is a lot of set-up, build-up, and world-construction, which by itself is rather dry and boring. They are, however, necessary for the story to progress. During such times, I try to make those sections easier to read by injecting some humor, which really is hit or miss. The really high-stakes and "intense" moments for the story hasn't really arrived yet. I certainly am not intending for DBA to be a crack fic! It'll have its crack moments and it will have its serious moments. Regarding characterizations, that's a tough call to make as an author. Too close to the canon and it's like a copy-and-paste, which many would find boring. A little too far from the source and many might say that it's unfaithful to the original. I'm certainly getting a mixed-bag of responses about certain TFS characterizations! I can only say that I did not choose any of my character's personalities without reason and that things that don't make sense now WILL make sense later. As of now, I would say that the Saiyan Arc is the weakest section of DBA as a whole and I did expect a lot of readers to drop the story at the beginning. Though, that's my personal opinion, and I'm sure many might disagree or agree with me after everything is said and done. DBA is a long-term story, so there's still plenty left to come! If you would like to check in on my story after a bit, I would say take a look at the chapter titles and try again when the story has just completed a "climax", which are usually battles. Once again, thanks for the review! :)

Equuleus_Nox:Hey, thanks for taking the time to review! I'm sorry to hear that this story is no longer enjoyable for you. I apologize as the author! I completely understand that certain types of goofiness or characterizations isn't for everyone, and you are correct in that too much of it can ruin a fiction. I'm quite aware of that fact! DBA, at the time of this review, hasn't really hit its stride yet in terms of plot. At the beginning, it is a lot of set-up, build-up, and world-construction, which by itself is rather dry and boring. They are, however, necessary for the story to progress. During such times, I try to make those sections easier to read by injecting some humor, which really is hit or miss. The really high-stakes and "intense" moments for the story hasn't really arrived yet. I certainly am not intending for DBA to be a crack fic! It'll have its crack moments and it will have its serious moments. Regarding characterizations, that's a tough call to make as an author. Too close to the canon and it's like a copy-and-paste, which many would find boring. A little too far from the source and many might say that it's unfaithful to the original. I'm certainly getting a mixed-bag of responses about certain TFS characterizations! I can only say that I did not choose any of my character's personalities without reason and that things that don't make sense now WILL make sense later. As of now, I would say that the Saiyan Arc is the weakest section of DBA as a whole and I did expect a lot of readers to drop the story at the beginning. Though, that's my personal opinion, and I'm sure many might disagree or agree with me after everything is said and done. DBA is a long-term story, so there's still plenty left to come! If you would like to check in on my story after a bit, I would say take a look at the chapter titles and try again when the story has just completed a "climax", which are usually battles. Once again, thanks for the review! :)

Yuki_55:idk… I like how you made the characters, they feel more? yeh, they just feel more! not just copy past.

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YaBoyChris:Thanks for taking to the time to read my review and respond. Like I said, I really like the starting chapters and I thought your wish was a good balance between powerful without being OP. Your way of responding to criticism really makes me optimistic about how this fic could turn out, even if I don’t end up getting back into it. I’ll make sure to check back in periodically, so just keep doing you man.

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