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Mattigician
MattigicianLv41yr
2024-01-01 12:45

Good story. Terrible fight scene writing. subpar overall writing. characters and world can use more depth, the power level of the empire or kingdom can be a starter. Shed some light onto his goals cause your Mc just reacted passively through the 14 chapters I read through. please develop the power scaling better, what tier was the monster he first faced, what can kill him blablabla. Think for a while then continue. Better yet just take some time polishing what you've already written. if you're first language isn't English then have a friend edit for you. Good luck.

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Ram_Guy10
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Bro wants depth in 14 chapters like come on 😭, and the whole thing is that he doesn't know that much about the world he's in. Obviously I can't go about saying how strong this monster is, or how strong this country is. Anyways, thanks for the review.

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