Item: Game of Thrones : Robert Baratheon
Rating: 3.8
Author: Dannt_

Dannt_Lv21yr

2023-10-14 12:44

Bueno, para empezar la trama esta buena, lo que le doy una calificación de 5 estrellas, en cambio la calidad de escritura se lleva 2 estrellas, necesitas mejorar la redacción y la ortografia, pues es un asco sinceramente, es cierto se entiende, pero mata la posición, deberias considerar una reescritura para mejor eso, puedes ayudarte de IAs para ello, ademas de que debes planear el fondo del mundo, Quieres que Cersei siga siendonla puta que es en la serie? Pues aparte de acostarse con su hermano, se acuesta con otras personas, como Lancel lannister. Debes planear eso, mejorar un poco las conversaciones y separar el como pasa a otro entorno. Si mejoras eso y planificaa tu historia, creeme que sera muy buena, por que la trama en si y la idea de la historia me encanta

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