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empire1
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2023-09-26 02:24

This is a great story but the massive info dumps really distract from the story. I think a good 60% percent of the novel could be deleted with little effect. NOTE to Author - If you want to add all of the additional info maybe highlight the start and end of the section if it doesn't actually have any impact on the story so readers can decide if they want to skip or not. Personally, I almost gave up on the story when reading all the Roman Empire and army info dump// I'm glad I didn't though That said I thought The Gladiator bit was very interesting. So I would really recommend thinking of a way to let the readers decide if they want to read all the background information so as to not put the uninterested ones off what is looking to be a great story

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marcoo
marcooAuthor

Thanks for the feedback! I got a little more negative feedback for the first 12-15 chapters than I expected :D I will stop using too much historical information in the future.

hero4hire
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tbh, historical facts are not the problem, its how unrelated its to the story, and it makes it feel like I HAVE to learn all those facts to understand the mainstory instead of merging that info along side the story as needed. Also, you need to hook the reader in the early chapter since those make or break a novel but here we have 10 completly unnecessary and cumbersome info dump anyone can look up on wiki.

marcoo:Thanks for the feedback! I got a little more negative feedback for the first 12-15 chapters than I expected :D I will stop using too much historical information in the future.
marcoo
marcooAuthor

Fixed it, but thank you! :)

hero4hire:tbh, historical facts are not the problem, its how unrelated its to the story, and it makes it feel like I HAVE to learn all those facts to understand the mainstory instead of merging that info along side the story as needed. Also, you need to hook the reader in the early chapter since those make or break a novel but here we have 10 completly unnecessary and cumbersome info dump anyone can look up on wiki.
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