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2023-09-17 02:41

I'm usually not a fan of such stories but you executed it really well! The plot is expressive and engaging. Your writing is complex(in a good way) and evokes the right feelings. It's impressive, honestly. I could be wrong but, I think the readers of this app, or even the traditional books prefer a simple language. I mean you can use such creative descriptions for every three or four paragraphs but I feel like you overdid it a little? For me though, it's negligible. I feel like you did a really good job! Keep going!

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I really appreciate your review! 🥰 It means a lot that you found the plot engaging and liked the writing style. I hear you on the creative descriptions. I'm having doubts about that too. whether I should go for a more straightforward writing or not....😅 I'll work on finding a better balance. Your feedback is incredibly motivating, and I'm eager to keep the story rolling. Thanks a million for reading the novel and sharing your thoughts!

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