Overall, this story could use an overhaul in its presentation. Before any more chapters are released, the author should go through and edit the current ones. Most of the paragraphs are too long, and they run together.The world building also could use more work. I believe the pacing going forward should be tweaked a bit more in order for the story to flow better. It isn't living up to its full potential, so it's an average story.
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