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2023-08-26 07:13

A história é muito boa e muito divertida , essa pegada de VR deixa a história muito contagiante e empolgante , Sucesso parceiro você vai longe .

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Everything is good, but please don't make Jon a naive character, he should prioritise his strength foremost , It was Gwen decision to leave him( there is always a way ) she prioritise her family, for her benefits though reluctant it was her decision, Jon should think this with his brain 🧠 and be calculating whether 1: To achieve his goals, while surviving in this harsh world 2: To thow his plans away for a girl who leaves him when life gets hard , simply put she is not faithful, whatever the reason may be I don't want him to harrass her or get revenge. Just let her be.When in this world there are beautiful people everywhere and there must be more talented and loyal female for him in this world for him. Just put it this way would you rather have a wife who sells her body when life gets rough for you whether she loves you or not doesn't matter. Let's be practical he cannot have every women who loves him as his lover That's just destroying your hardwork done on this novel. Please I implore you to think about it. Gwen is not for him and I would be very sad for Jon if he gets out of his way to disturb her life when she has already come terms with it . Life doesn't work this way Your decision now will impact the story greatly and it's this decision which will set apart the mediocre novels from your work. I went out of the way just because I felt this novel resonate with me. I in no way want to degrade you but just said what on my mind. Please 🥺 ponder upon this. Effort done on Gwen is just not worth it her personality is not of a queen for our king ,he should understand although he put his life on line fighting ren. Even when he supported his decision to go to the academy before him. ##She will leave him when she finds no other way out.## Indulging in this women will definitely break his life. Even if she returns it will be for her benefits. Other mc might just be okay with an apology but I don't want jon to be like this. Heck she isn't even a main character. It's a do or die turn for this novel. Author please think even in real life why would you marry an ungrateful person when you can find someone much much better. A man cannot conquer the world if he lets his mind and emotion be swayed by such trivial things. We don't want Gwen as his lover. Neither you or I would love such person So why make Jon. A leader cannot make such rash decision as such is the cost of success. This is not a wuxia. All the best sir your work is astounding just give it a thought.

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