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DvD_007
DvD_007Lv51yr
2024-03-29 15:30

hey man the story is interesting but honestly the grammar and overall writing quality is bad. I noticed that you seem to be translating from Spanish to English but you should either just post it in Spanish so those that understand can read it or just take more to actually proofread the story. if I didn't know Spanish or wasn't used to mtl it would be pretty hard to understand the story

Naruto: Avatar World

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3.8
128 Chs

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Daniel_Felipe_3025
Daniel_Felipe_3025Lv1

a great fanfic that "respects" the personality of the original characters and so far has a decent story, but the problem is the very short chapters.

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thewanderingsole
thewanderingsoleLv4

This is too 2-dimensional for me. It's like DC comics where Batman catches the joker, puts him in a cell, telling him he won't be able to escape. The joker escapes, killing a bunch of people, causing mayhem killing more people. Batman catches the joker and repeat. I mean, don't get me wrong, it's a good story where the mc is true to the og Naruto, but the way the author had the people of the avatar world embrace narutos ideology of forgive and forget is just lazy writing to me. You can't just forgive the people who raped/killed your spouse and children. Especially if said people also happen to be your slavers.

1yr
LightningGodWolf
LightningGodWolfLv15

At first, I was really enjoying this Fanfic. I thought you were doing really good with the characters and everything but then I caught up to the newest chapters, at chapter 86 I had to stop because all of a sudden you bring firearms into the world of Avatar. Yeah, I ain’t doing that, thanks for the read for a while, but I’m dropping.

1yr
EternalSolitude
EternalSolitudeLv4

If anyone has time, pls leave a proper sypnosis. Thx

1yr
Brady_Lustlara
Brady_LustlaraLv1

Pretty boring fic. The MC is OG Naruto so he's going about this war as his hippie self. Peace this and that. Then there's his stupidity thrown in when he spends most of his time trying to remake ramen and turning aang and the crew into even bigger hippies.

1yr
Zenos_Maxima2611
Zenos_Maxima2611Lv1

MC is naruto og, obviously he's a stubborn. second, I don't like pacifists. prefer realistic and pragmatic people, more reasonable. thirdly, the author seems to just stick to the avatar canon, because most of them are like that.

1yr
julian_lopez_4908
julian_lopez_4908Lv1

Naruto luego de su batalla contra Sasuke en valle del fin en un intento detenerlo para evitar que huya con Orochimaru, se ve en el problema de aparecer en un mundo extraño, ahora no solo tenia que encontrar la forma de volver, sino que también de sobrevivir. de una loca que lanza fuego azulado y sus dos extrañas amigas que lo perseguirían donde sea que fuera para atraparlo.

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The_reader_ofnovel
The_reader_ofnovelLv14

This is a great novel however it’s been months since an update is this novel dropped ??

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Tahir_abbasi
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when are you going to make chapter 129 😀

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