chapter 11/11 Writing Quality there are few grammatical errors and sudden name change in the story Stability of Updates author never mentioned how many times a week s/he is gonna update Story Development the way the story looks to me is that the flow of the story seems to be forceful and a little bit bland Character Design close to none the MC personality was never mentioned before he transmigrated in the MCU the powers was never been characterized. power 1: what kind of superman he is, superboy-prime, silver superman, all star superman or ultraman power 2: A. the AI, do the intelligence of it the same as the original AI. how he communicate with it, there our times the they converse with each other like the typical System but there times in which he needs to access his phone. B. where is the main body of the AI? in a physical super computer or within the internet C. does the AI have a 100% loyalty towards him. if not, and the AI behaves just exactly like the original brainiac, then peter is pretty much f*cked. World Background close to none the world background is like an amalgamation of multiple Marvel universe. and it was never mentioned which is which summary the main idea of this FanFic have a great potential, it just needed a little bit of elbow grease.
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