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2023-09-02 10:31

just started but I'm hoping it will be great.

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what do you think so far

John_Davis_0418
John_Davis_0418Lv4

it's good so far have my ston

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Great_maid_Oni
Great_maid_OniLv5

I'm late with this review, I'm doing this sincerely, I don't want to diminish or offend anyone. let's go . The story addresses a player character who is the strongest from the beginning, has some holes but is well done, maintains the proposed standard without many personality variations (he was supposed to be evil but is nice or something, that doesn't happen). The case of approaching a dragon character is interesting because in the OC it was something frustrating to see and here we have the opportunity for a new development that is perhaps more interesting. the scenario hasn't been explored much yet, but we're still at the beginning of the story, -100 chapters, basically we have a completely authorial scenario and that excites me a lot... The writing is a weak point in the story, the quality has been improving with new chapters, but we still have some problems. The dialogues and fights are tiring and slow, we managed to skip the whole event and we won't miss much, this in my opinion is a big problem. recently in the last chapters I see a lot of description about smoking, if it were only a few times that would be fine, but it is already in a quantity that is starting to bother, is it really necessary to have one or two paragraphs describing the plant you are smoking? The main positive point is the author, I really liked him! He was very attentive to his readers, responded to our comments and was always open to opinions and suggestions, this makes me really happy and motivates me to continue following his work…. Thank you for your work, I hope to see you growing even more!!

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