Review Detail of Woshi in Overlord : God of Darkness

The story is your generic overlord fanfiction along with inevitable droppage. Honestly it isn't too bad, it's readable in a grammatical sense, but the voice/narration used in the story is terrible. "Welcome to the 11th floor of Nazarick, or as I like to call it, my super cool crib. Seriously, everything you see here is a result of my wild imagination from that big red moon hanging out in the sky like it owns the place to the palace that screams "Vampires rule!" Why stick to just training and being all serious when you can have fun, right? Gotta keep those thoughts of tomorrow at bay somehow." I know each author has their own writing style but constantly talking to your readers like this is off putting and unbearable. Don't write like this unless you know what you're doing.