Review Detail of InternetSaint in Bleach: From You to Me

Thank you for the feedback! The vagueness is definitely a negative. It's probably infuriating to some and interesting to others. It's certainly not a strong aspect. I've read over your comments. It's nice to hear some thoughtful criticism. Thank you for checking out the story!

Some thoughtful criticism. Oddly enough, I've been asked to make it more vague. Or ignorant. By this logic, maybe instead of calling people by their names I should just call them 'Human 1' or 'Human 2'. Culture is a thing of the past. Let's not call swords or clothes what they are, it's completely unnecessary. As is the need for more detail.

Ooh. I like this one the most. Doesn't 'fit the Japanese people at all'. Hmm. If we look back a little, we see dated practices for Cannabis use in the Shinto Religion. But smoking is little bit of a stretch since humans are not very curious beings. Prostitution... absolutely didn't exist in Japan. Whatsoever. Doesn't... Never will... Soaplands are where you buy soap. Anyway, what I'm seeing is that this fanfic doesn't actually take place in Soul Society, a magical, mystical place. It takes place in Japan...

This is the guy who called a couple of commenters and reviewers cringe...

I have thought about it some more and the thing I noticed about your story is that it is always told from an outside perspective. In other stories you have your occasional outside view when a new character is being introduced, but in your story it is a constant thing. Even when the POV claims it is first person, it actually isn't. At best you get a "YouTube reaction" style side show to what is actually happening which is largely without context. The usual "here is why I do this or that" doesn't exist most of the time. I feel like the only real 1st person POV we get is when the focus is on Furoufushi.

I see. Thank you for the constructive criticism. I will review my first person perspectives in-depth. I can see the third-person inflexion in, for example, Chapter 46, Batsu's perspective. It's a good catch. Is there anything else besides vague storytelling and improper characterization?

I most definitely overstated that it is always told from an outside perspective. The story itself is good, just told in a strange way. The whole Shinigami meeting part is very confusing because nothing is ever directly explained. Yachiru's introduction for example came out of nowhere and I don't even remember how or why she ended up with the group. She killed some people in front of everyone and then got her sword stolen by Yamato??? Why did she do that? Why did Yamato take the sword? Who even is that girl?!! The girl hadn't even joined the group yet when all of this happened and only later we learn why the sword is even important to her which is also super vague though here it makes sense. But why does Yamato still keep the sword?! Also 20 chapters later I finally read in some backhanded comment made by the MC that he could see Yachiru's potential by reading her Reshi or whatever its called. lol

Productive? Who said anything about productive? When did I say anything about r+pe? When did we get to honor? This was about vices. You know, like impoverished North Rukongai where business isn't exactly flourishing. You agree that prostitution exists, but somehow Japanese people don't and have never indulged in it? Red light districts were a huge facet of Edo period nightlife. And why are you saying I'm smoking? I'm just in awe of how you got to this point. It's fine to insult me, but saying I'm wrong when you just agreed and failed to provide anything of value is just mind-boggling. All in all, cringe.

Finally some good food. This is what I'm genuinely looking for. Not 'trash' or 'cringe'. Actual points I need to work on from cited passages. These are great questions that I should've asked in retrospect. And now I wished I had. Thank you, genuinely.

"Red light districts were a huge facet of Edo period nightlife." lol you think Geisha are prostitutes or something? "When did we get to honor?" We are talking about Japanese culture duide... it is all about honor. <.< Clearly google has only made the ignorant more arrogant...

Tbh I felt the same way about the Shinigami gathering. I should've worked it over some more before releasing it.

If your story is trash, I will call it trash don't worry.

I didn't say Geishas. But Geishas were certainly a part of that nightlife scene. Why are we on Geishas? And why honor? People need to live right? Pleasure quarters were a real thing...

Christ, that took forever for you to get to this point. Much appreciated, at least you can finally say it.

I actually do very often(mostly) give 1 star single sentence reviews. 3 stars means this is a flawed but still enjoyable story. xD

if the whole society is poor then working as a prostitute isn't really helping. No, if you are poor you and your whole family work in the fields. Again, Japanese culture IS Bushido, the warrior code and honor stands above everything. I remember just a while ago there was a story of some bus driver in japan being accused of something shameful and him committing suicide so as to not burden his family with his shame. Being a prostitute is a big no no in ancient Japan, just as not being a virgin before marriage is a reason for women to kill themselves. I remember another story of some famous Japanese Samurai coming back after many epic battles and finding out his wive cheated on him, which resulted in him killing himself and burning his own castle down together with his wive and children.

But Bushido is samurai code

Just like Christianity is western culture and Hinduism is native Indian culture so is Bushido Japanese culture. Death before dishonor. Are you actually from Cambodia? Maybe that is why you don't know these things?

so, those geisha and farmers you talk about, were they samurai?

So, those Geisha and farmers you talk about, are they samurai?