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2023-10-30 00:23

I like how the story is going honestly! Also the pov is giving a very good vibe to the story. Both the lead characters are very well structured. Overall, I like it. ❤️

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The author delves into the world of opulence, power, and an unexpected romantic connection between two contrasting individuals. Alex Grande, the cold-hearted billionaire, exudes an aura of authority and control, while Jenny Core, a seemingly ordinary girl, becomes entwined with his life in a way that defies logic. The premise sets the stage for an intriguing encounter between two vastly different worlds. Alex's dominance and ability to command attention offer a glimpse into a life of extravagance and influence, while Jenny's normalcy highlights relatable human qualities. However, while the plot introduces an interesting dynamic, the execution falls somewhat flat. The characters lack depth beyond their surface traits, and their motivations and emotions remain largely unexplored. The initial spark between Alex and Jenny feels rushed and lacks the development needed to make their connection believable. The alternating perspectives give insight into both characters' thoughts, but the writing style struggles to capture the depth of their experiences. The repetitive use of phrases like "cold heartless billionaire" and "ordinary girl" detracts from the storytelling, making it difficult for readers to become fully immersed in the narrative. "Love Unveiled: Billionaire's Heart" shows promise in its exploration of the collision between privilege and simplicity, but it needs further development to truly engage readers. By delving deeper into the characters' backgrounds, motivations, and emotions, the story could transform into a more compelling tale of unexpected romance and personal growth.I like your novel but it could use some serious proof reading and work, know that this like all other works is a WIP and I know there's scope to improve. thank you. i hope you will read this with an open heart.

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