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2023-08-16 18:40

Concept is good. But I feel that the characters are too bland or OOC. so much info dumping and so little interaction/drama between characters. But you can improve too, I guess. also the HSPC would not have let him go to UA ,Hawks was a fine example of being HSPC tool. He's too OP and all the people know about it. You should have gradually released abilities one by one instead on everything before going to UA. Anyway, Thanks for trying.!! Good One.

In MHA as an UCHIHA

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What do you suggest I do now?

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I'm going to shamelessly give a rating so don't go losing it on me! Also I'm gonna try to improve the quality of chapters so it's gonna be slow updating so plz don't forget to read when it's getting updated.

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it’s like i can tell they can write good, but they over do it a lot, trying to make things more deep than it really is. i swear he mentioned something about the cosmic dancing of fate like 10k times

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