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BlueJeans
BlueJeansLv31yr
2023-09-22 19:27

This book have really a good start introducing the earlier stage of protagonist. Each chapter consist a good amount or words, so it's not that short and not that long. Since it seem to develop slowly, reader must be patience and take your time reading this book. I still not quite grasp about the world background, we might get more description on the world building of the story.Its really refreshing to read a book that not similiar plot like those popular book in this platform. I hope as the author progressing the story. It plot development will get better and unique. Overall, this book is recommended. I hope you guys also try to give it a chance.

Nightshade of Unveiled

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Aidan_Grey
Aidan_GreyAuthor

Well compared to my first novel i think this is my best work when im writing this novel i enjoyed it so much and i hope you guys enjoyed it as much as i did

1yr

Uncle_Moon
Uncle_MoonLv4

You have an interesting plot idea while there is a shadow mention I guess maybe his power is related to shadowsThe writing quality is excellent, I love the description of the action. good works there hope to read more chapter

1yr
Dante_AAA
Dante_AAALv1

(PART OF REVIEW SWAP) Warning: Everything I say is subjective and it's just a reader's perspective and all that. I'm just one person, and this might not be my type of novel. First Impressions: Wow, those really are 4 whole chapters before the first chapter. I've never read a book where the glossary was at the start, but it kind of worries me that you might not explain it later on since it's already here. I kind of skipped over 'Nightshade' since I'm not a fan of reading dictionaries. Onto the prologue. I actually think this could act as chapter one since it introduces your major characters. Now, I know that prologue is just another word for introduction, but I noticed that a lot of people just skip the prologue and jump into the first chapter, which is not great, especially when you have multiple prologues. The writing is great. I think the grammar is almost perfect, though there are some things like putting a period before a quotation mark ("like this.") and putting a period before continuing a quote ("Like," said Dan. "I don't know if that's right"). Other than that, you have good descriptors and an overall nice writing style. There are some things like Kael saying "Was it a dream?" like three times in a row and also talking to himself though, so I think the dialogue can be improved just a bit ("I can't just accept that some shadowy figure appeared out of nowhere and started talking to me" is kind of a strange thing to talk to your self about. If it was me, I would've had the whole sequence just be him thinking in his head instead of whispering to, particularly no one). Characters: Now, I only read the prologues and skimmed the next few chapters, but so far, it's pretty good. I like Kael as well as Jake - while he lasted. It looks like a solo adventure so far, which is good, but it might become a problem if he keeps talking to himself. It might just be me and since I don't talk to myself, I don't know if that's how it works, but since this is a novel and not a movie, I think he can just keep his thoughts as thoughts. As for Kael, he's a good old protagonist. He's curious and adventurous - more than the average person. What more can I say? Plot: So far, it's looking like a good 'isekai-type' adventure. My only complaint is that it's a bit slow. So far, we're in the real world, researching, then go to this new world (Forrest) and then he's at a meadow by the end of chapter 2. Bot counting 'Nightshade', it took us 4 chapters to get here, but I think it could've been done in two (maybe even by just stitching the chapters together and tweaking some things). Chapter 2+3 and Chapter 4+5+6. I'm not saying you should change it that way, but it just feels like a natural progression of plot for me. Final Review: Too many prologues, good writing, and good characters, but Kael talks to himself too much, the plot is fine, but the pacing is a bit slow. Overall, I think this is a good start but of course, you can revise the chapters f you want to. What I like to do is keep a 'definitive' edition in a Google doc, as the final product which encompasses all the chapters. There I make changes like swapping chapters and such. I have a pipedream of publishing so, lol. So far so good, 8/10.

1yr
ChiseledMystic
ChiseledMysticLv3

While writing this review, there are just three chapters. The story has great potential with a unique plot. I believe the author has excellent ideas for creating the world. Overall great read. Waiting for more chapters.

1yr
Maeve_Lindley
Maeve_LindleyLv11

(part of review swap) I think you have a great plot and sorry here. while it is not my cup of tea, your writing and description is great. you really set the scenes well and give insight into the characters experiences. this is a great adventure and mystery story. I am unsure about the 'glossary' page at the start but I did see a comment asking for one from a reader. you take on feedback and give the readers what they want! great stuff keep going 👏

1yr
superAyan
superAyanLv13

I always enjoyed reading novels where the narration's delving into serving such figurative and descriptive sentences to the readers. Like the author can make something poetic out of a very simple detail. Imagery is good and writing is great! Also I can tell the author has a wide range of vocab. This book is a good read! 🙌🙌💯

1yr
Carmen_Kingsman
Carmen_KingsmanLv1

The author wrote coolly. You can get into the atmosphere of the story and laugh with the characters. But I would advise to add more characters and add more sharp turns in the plot so that the readers are close to having a stroke.And so I wish the author patience to complete the book. We are with you bro)

1yr
HouseOfLee
HouseOfLeeLv13

It’s unique, very intriguing to read. You’re a talented writer, the story brought me into its world and I felt like I was there. Keep up the amazing work!

1yr
Merlin_duke
Merlin_dukeLv1

love the story has great descriptive moments the plot is well balanced although 3 prologue is new to me i was planning just to skip it and head to the chapter but i'm glad i didn't do that cause it was a great beginning for the main character im on the last chapter right now i look forward to your next chapter

1yr
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