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Kyatus
KyatusLv151yr
2023-10-29 05:46

Hello. First off I would like to say that I like this novel. it has a really great concept and cultivation system. But there are a few issues that are holding back this story. One of which is the pretty bad grammar in early chapter. The others is that it is trying to do too many things at once without establishing much of a foundation to understand what is going on. There is a very heavy inspiration in this story from “Journey of the Fate Destroying Emperor”. And this inspiration is a good thing. But the author of this story is trying to do something that was shown in FDE without giving us much understanding of the world the characters are currently in and their power levels. This is shown through the main character where he is shown as being much more powerful than anyone else his age but we don’t really have any understanding about his power level despite him being the MC. I just really hope that the other reads this and understands my criticisms and can maybe try to either fix the issues or just try to avoid it in the future. I still really love the concept of the story and will follow it in the future. SPOILER Issue: . . . . Another big issue is that the author constantly switches POV to the characters other selves, future selves, other timelines, ?? And it is extremely confusing to follow especially when the characters are only in the third realm of power.

The Sovereign of True Immortality

Nansha
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Nansha
NanshaAuthor

Thank you!

1yr
Nansha
NanshaAuthor

but this is heavily inspired to Demon King Against the Sky and Great Desolation- The Person that came out of Hongmeng. both are mtled.

1yr
Kyatus
KyatusLv15

Oh sorry i just recently read through Fate Destroying Emperor and there are a lot of similarities especially with the whole becoming emperor thing. If it is not inspired by that then my bad. But I just want to say that I really like the idea and where this story is heading. It is just that Yun Haorun doesn’t feel like the MC a lot of the time and there isn’t really anyone else that is picking up the slack of being the MC which is confusing.

Nansha:but this is heavily inspired to Demon King Against the Sky and Great Desolation- The Person that came out of Hongmeng. both are mtled.
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WaitWhoWhat
WaitWhoWhatLv14

Needs to be edited or proofread. The author (or translator?) mixes too many words up to make it an immersive story.

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No_No_4004
No_No_4004Lv4

This story has an interesting concept and a good execution and I hope you continue the good story development. The only area that I see you can improve on is your grammer which I have noticed is getting better each chapter. I hope you continue your amazing story and I can’t wait to see how your story develops.

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Pires_1123
Pires_1123Lv4

The story is developing really well. Even though it is a cultivation novel, it doesn't have a brain dead MC nor is he a licking dog. __ The realms are well explained but I think the author could add a bit more description to their strenght (like how much weight they can carry, how powerfull are their attacks, how fast).___ The only bad point is the writting errors. They brake the flow and sometimes make difficult to understand the sentence ___ I recomend you to try to use a grammar cheker or ChatGPT (only need to write "correct grammar:", make a paragraph and them paste the whole chapter there) ___ I'm making these spaces because, from about 2 months, the app no longer lets me make paragraphs.

1yr
Mik_King
Mik_KingLv15

Well from what I have read to, chapter 8, it seems to be a great read somthing that I would like, but the translation or general grammar is hard to read, there are words missing, wrong order and at times the sentence did not make sense, but everything else was nice, but I dropping this since its not enjoyable to read anymore with the broken grammar

1yr
padfoot_thewog
padfoot_thewogLv15

This may look like a fake review but I love this book's wholeheartedly if you like cultivation and if you especially like understanding how the power systems in cultivation or power fantasy series works you will love this please read

1yr
one_piece_2795
one_piece_2795Lv4

author do you plan on finishing the novel

1yr
LordSirius
LordSiriusLv4

I've read chapter 1 and so far it seems interesting enough. Though the grammar needs some work

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