Its my story after al uwu 5 starrrrssssss 69

First thing first I'd like to say is to take this review with a side of salt as I am not a native English speaker nor am I creative enough to write a story and I have only read up to chapter 7.This story has a fun concept as long as you're aware of honkai lore (it would probably be a little harder to understand what is going on without knowing it though the story just started so that can easily be explained over time).The writing itself is understandable and I haven't seen any obvious grammar or spelling mistakes.My only real problems with this story is how things that are already explained are repeated over and over again (like the butler's loyalty or who he is in general) and that everything feels over described (if that's a thing). There are descriptions for almost anything and it feels like it ruins the flow of the story.

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Pretty good, definitely has potential. Though the dialog and inner monolouge are to long and talk in circles and certainly saps the enjoyment and motivation to read another sentence, if it just repeated a rephrase version of the pervious phragraph like three times.

Hoyoverse Story? Here 5 Star! But for now let's see how it goes.

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Synopsis impressed me enough to actually make me wanna read the novel... please don't drop this author

MORE CHAPTERS!!!

I will review this properly after chapter 30 release if I'm still reading this then. For now here's some boosts in rating for new author. Good luck author.👍