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002_Yuki_OnnaLv31yr
2023-09-03 21:15

Okay, this took me a while, to be honest, a few parts of this novel felt not that relatable to me xD. I'm not SAYING IT'S BAD OR ANYTHING. Anyways, let's get into reviewing. Writing quality- The story is quite descriptive, but what I felt was lacking or maybe it's just how the author writes was the 'conversation descriptions'. Okay so, it's just enrapturing to see the descriptions while the convo is going. For example- He put down his tea cup, "You might not be right either, Mr. White" he continued as he clasped his hands, "Blah blah blah" Something like that, which I randomly came up with right now. Other than that I think it was nice. Stable updates- It's 6 chapters per week, that's great. Great work author! Keep fighting... Story Development- It's fast-paced in a good way, Some places there might be times you'll feel ''oh that's way too early or fast'' but it's all for a reason~ Let's go with that. Character Design- It's just the inceptive stage of this novel, so I won't really comment much on the characters because, in these types of novels, we have a lot to discover. World Background- The timeline the author chose is not too medieval but not modern either, that's my favourite timeline, to be honest. I think it's in the 1700s to 1800s if I am not wrong. However, I wonder if they have thematic elements in the story. Great work author~ Keep fighting, you are awesome!

Way Back To Neverland

InkDreamer07
4.9
32 Chs

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InkDreamer07
InkDreamer07Author

Thank you for sharing such an honest review, I will make corrections in the next chapters as you mentioned hope you like them and the timeline is between 1700 to 1800 You were right about that, and I am glad to hear your thoughts 🥰

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To all my respected readers, its my first time writing a novel so you mah find many mistakes, it will be helpful if you mention them, Thank you and have a great reading 😇😇❤️

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Something strange is happening in Mist Haven. People are going missing, and the sky is falling! They say it is because of a strange group called Neverland. But what or who is behind these strange events? Way Back To Neverland will surprise you with its masterful storytelling, wit, and fantastic characters. Each page has been carefully crafted to create an air of mystery and leave you wanting more. I highly recommend giving this story a try, who knows you just might become...enchanted by it.

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