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trayad70Lv151yr
2024-03-18 14:34

This book has a great storyline and interesting characters. At first I wasnt’t for the trupple, but it grew on me. What hasn’t grown on me is the amount of wasted words the author utilizes in their efforts of creating visual descriptions of the scenery and characters. Literally, in most chapters, the 1st few pages are repetitive descriptions of the ‘lush estate’ or ‘beauty of the mls. If they have to provide a detailed reminder every chapter of the aesthetic prowess of the characters & backdrop, do it in 1-2 paragraphs per chapter rather than repeating yourself multiple times wasting multiple pages of each chapter. A proofreader is definitely needed.

The Ger's Contract Marriage [BL]

Ellie_Ethereal
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612 Chs

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Ellie_Ethereal
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Thank you for the constructive criticism. All feedback is so important to help me grow as a writer. This is my first novel so I'm learning as I go and balancing a full-time day job and continuing studies. I tend to describe quite a lot to help me visualize and sometimes when I have writer's block. I'm looking to add a proofreader to my team of one, as my budget permits. There'll be some back editing then. Thank you again for reading and for all your support!!!

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Polaha
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I’m interested let me know if you do decide to get one

Ellie_Ethereal:Thank you for the constructive criticism. All feedback is so important to help me grow as a writer. This is my first novel so I'm learning as I go and balancing a full-time day job and continuing studies. I tend to describe quite a lot to help me visualize and sometimes when I have writer's block. I'm looking to add a proofreader to my team of one, as my budget permits. There'll be some back editing then. Thank you again for reading and for all your support!!!
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Hey everyone! Author here 🤓 Thanks for checking out my novel. It's pretty niche 😆 but I'm excited to write this story for you to read. Feel free to point out any grammar or inconsistencies so I can make the story even better. Thanks again for your support!

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Stumbled on this gem randomly. I want to commend the author for the really compelling writing like the feels, the atmosphere like its just filled to the brim with artistic and compelling words. I really really appreciate the gradual world-building like its not a in-your-face, word vomit but its so beautifully written! I'm not even half the story and I can already tell that this is very promising especially with the 3 protagonists. i also really love that they aren't the "perfect" characters but rather flawed and I really love reading their monologues. I'll come back for another review once I've finished it. so hapoy i found this!! thank you for your hardwork author-sama! [img=update]

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