A good novel and writing is excellent except for few parts that can be improved:1. Break larger para into smaller - Easier to read- Gives the illusion of Long chapters. 2. There are many capitalisation issues, make sure the first word in sentence is capital. Rest the story is going bit fast paced, but its upto webnovel tastes.

It's good, but it's not that great. The story seems a little too fast at the beginning. While reading it's kinda blunt cuz I find that the story have a similar story out there and it's doesn't have an attraction to it, so it can be a great and enjoyable to read, but the overall, it's not that bad.

Hello. Is there any kind of yuri here? I hate that stuff and would like to know before reading. thanks

A Trainwreck of a Novel: A Dismal Execution of a Promising Concept This book is a glaring example of how not to write a story. What could have been an intriguing premise is utterly derailed by a series of catastrophic missteps that render the reading experience not just disappointing, but downright painful. From the jarring interruptions to the cringe-worthy dialogue, the author’s choices consistently undermine any potential this narrative might have had. First and foremost, the author’s decision to pepper the chapters with unnecessary author’s notes is baffling. Instead of immersing readers in the story, these self-indulgent distractions yank us out of the narrative, making it feel more like a lecture than a work of fiction. Coupled with the use of informal language like "fr," it’s clear the author is trying too hard to connect with a younger audience, but instead, it comes off as immature and unrefined. This lack of professionalism is infuriating and suggests a fundamental misunderstanding of how to engage readers. The dialogue is another monumental failure. Characters sound less like real people and more like caricatures from a bad sitcom, spouting lines that are either painfully cheesy or utterly ridiculous. This lack of authenticity makes it impossible to connect with anyone in the story. To make matters worse, the absence of proper name tags in dialogue leaves readers guessing who is speaking, creating a confusing mess that detracts from the overall clarity of the narrative. And then there are the sex scenes—if you can even call them that. They are a catastrophic failure, filled with awkward, laughable dialogue and descriptions that are either overly graphic or absurdly vague. Instead of evoking any sense of intimacy, these moments are so poorly executed that they leave readers cringing in embarrassment. The pacing is horrendous, with rushed transitions that strip any emotional weight from the encounters. The author’s lack of understanding of consent and emotional nuance is alarming, making these scenes not just poorly written but also troubling. Finally, the excessive use of long paragraphs is a testament to the author’s disregard for the reader’s experience. Important ideas and character developments are buried under dense blocks of text, making it a chore to sift through the narrative. This lack of respect for the reader’s time and attention is infuriating and highlights a fundamental flaw in the author’s approach to storytelling. In conclusion, this book is a trainwreck from start to finish. The combination of disruptive author’s notes, laughable dialogue, disastrous intimacy, and overwhelming paragraph structure creates a reading experience that is not just frustrating but utterly exasperating. I can only hope the author takes this critique to heart and learns from these glaring mistakes. Until these issues are addressed, this book stands as a glaring example of missed potential and a complete failure in storytelling.

I like the novel but I wish the author gives more updates

it not bad it's good but lacks a emotion overall it's going in the right direction you don't need to pay attention to the names of anything as long there practical [img=recommend]