Review Detail of 002_Yuki_Onna in Draft for ReWorld

Before anyone here starts reading my review let me just make myself super clear that I am a huge reader, It's not like I only read webnovels- in fact, I don't read that many webnovels but paperbacks. That's why I am a sucker for descriptive language and conversations. Okay, so now. Here's my review of this cute story: Writing Quality- I gave it a 3. I feel like the emotions and the surrounding description can be a bit better than how it was originally written. Instead of writing sounds like "uuwaaah" and "sob sob" and "chop-chop", try describing them. 'Cause that makes more impact and lets the reader connect with your world and characters. Then the mixing of povs, I mean it's understandable, It happens even I as a writer did that mistake so it's not a biggie. But how you write dialogues is a biggie, Girl. You are writing the character name at the end in brackets. No lies, I thought they were some sounds at first. And then the fighting scene, it's supposed to be a thrilling and exciting part of the novel, so put the right description there. Overall, what I mean is to try describing more of what is needed to improve your character or the world. Now, no matter what I wrote above the story was enjoyable, the thing I liked about your writing was that it is super easy to follow. In the prologue, you've already described how it all ended and through the main chapters it was really easy to understand the story and what your character is trying to convey, I really admire how you described the town, till now where I have read. It was my favourite chapter. Stability of Updates- 5 stars. The author is doing a wonderful job of uploading almost every day. I really really want to take inspiration from you and start doing that with my novels too. It is really an important part of webnovel before it gets popular. Hehe~ if you know what I mean. Story Development- 5 stars. Go read and you'll know what I mean. It is flowing smoothly, and the pacing is nice. It won't let you get bored to a point. Character Design- I gave it a 5. But there's a thing I will surely wanna point out, try describing them too. Like- I don't really know how to make you understand, so here's goes to nothing. Look at this example- Lyla felt her ears twitch and her tail flick, signs of her growing irritation. She hated being ignored, especially by someone who owed her a favour. "Hey, are you even listening?" she clenched her fist as she slammed it on the table. So like that, I mean it describes that she has ears and a tail which makes her a cat girl. That's what I was trying to tell you but yea it's your story and you have the right. Finally, World Background- Here's the thing, I understand that you described in prologue how the world is, you described the town they live in, that's cool. However, world background is not till there, you need to describe the surroundings your character is in while they are doing something. It's just I felt there was a lack of it. That's why I pointed it out. Overall this story is well-deserved, 4.4/- It was enjoyable and I think I will keep reading. Keep doing what you are doing cuz you are awesome at it.