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Elvlin
ElvlinLv131yr
2023-08-16 01:00

The narrative is compelling, and the characters are well-developed. I'm eagerly anticipating the upcoming chapters. As I delved deep into the book, I noticed a few grammatical oversights, but overall, the concept is strong and holds immense potential. I'm rooting for the author's success!

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IamFallenAngel
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Thanks for your review buddy.One review from any reader, deal me a lot of help as I can analyze many thing, where I'm lacking.Thanks for your support, I will focus on improving my novel and rooting a well novel for you.

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Thefantastictouch
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Dropped at the end of the 4th chapter. Usually, when I write reviews , I try to at least talk about a book's pros. However for this one... i hadn't seen any.   So , let's get right down to the cons : - The writing style is very amateur. The first chapter and the majority of the second one were honestly , skippable.The author could have just opened up the book on the scene with the Mc measuring his talent before he revealed us he was a transmigrator and nothing would have changed.And it's all because it told us nothing useful .Plus the event that occured were explained and talked about later by the Mc . We only care about the Mc and the story when we start a book. So please focus on that rather than detailing how this character felt , which rank he got and what the instructor said. Moreover , the narration which switches to these uninteresting characters before we even know the Mc , and the writing style in itself ( structure of the sentences, words used, etc.) scream amateurism. - The writing quality is low. The author said he used ChatGPT, and it shows.The first chapter was not only badly written , the conjugation, which switches between tenses and use uncorrectly each one of them, makes the whole thing even harder to read.Add to this the many mistakes , and you  end up driven out of the story the more you read. -  The pace is slow. To give you an idea of the chapter 's length, the 4th one was 1223 words( according to the author himself). Yet it appeared to me to be more than this , because i was simply bored.Nothing exciting or intriguing happened.And the general ambiance reinforced this feeling of slowness too. - The general ambiance is like the Mc. The mc is the cold necromancer type , and so is the general vibe of the book. If only the Mc´s inner monologues contrasted his actions , or if the book jumbled with many ambiances , it would have been better. But it's all up to the author in the end. Still , for me , this book isn't the one. I pray for the author's improvement.    

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