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Jetmach
JetmachLv31yr
2023-08-15 14:44

Might as well be skipping rocks with all the jumping around without explanation. Find a needle and poke yourself somewhere, it would be less painful.

Morningstar House (GOT)

AERIC35
2.9
27 Chs

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Taragorm
TaragormLv1

The whole story feels like a timeskip mostly desciptions of events in passing feels more like a summary at the back of a book. Rather than show its all tell which makes it impossible to become immersed which is a shame because theres a good story here if it was told correctly.

1yr

AlanCee
AlanCeeLv14

It feels like the author tried to make the chapters longer just by repeating words in a different way. This story is supposed to be about the mc, but instead it’s an info dump about the GOT world progressing through the years with tiny changes. All of this is just written in past tense with only small flashes of first person pov, this story has no substance. Grammatically, author is only decent with mistakes here and there. So basically, you’re writing statements of what happened and not actually telling a story.

1yr
Bemnet_Tefera_8473
Bemnet_Tefera_8473Lv4

i am seeing th mc as an observer than the protagonist he is to passive

1yr
TheTrueGilgamesh
TheTrueGilgameshLv6

there's no point of this story ever existing, the whole premise of the story is him being reincarnated what's the point of being reincarnated backstory when he doesn't even know anything?

1yr
YourRaven
YourRavenLv4

I'll be quite honest with this. Most of the content and events of the book is exactly how it happened and there being only having seldom if not bare bone additions or changes to the story. It was basically a play by play of events that originally happened but with an added OC in the discussions and/or Drama that was happening.

1yr
Benoit_Valtin
Benoit_ValtinLv11

everything has already been said, actually the character looks more like a voyeur, the changes are minimal. moreover a lot of the story in the third person without dialogue. It looks like artificial intelligence content.

1yr
AERIC35
AERIC35Author

please rate this story ....and write your thoughts about this story....thanks🙏

1yr
SERBMADHAUS
SERBMADHAUSLv12

It could've been so good....but the author got lazy and failed to deliver....it all feels like a giant time skip. 'this book is all bones no meat'

1yr
Bro_is_bored
Bro_is_boredLv4

below average . no concept . Mc is dumb but author wants him look cool and dashing . Low level planing .Side character are 2d. If anyone read and watch ASOIAF series, his brain cells will be melted after reading this.

1yr
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