Author i like the premise of your story but a few things can be improved. Like you tend to drag the scene everytime and make it unnecessarily over dramatic. Moreover you can use an app to correct the spelling and grammatical mistakes. Do it write now otherwise....
GodaSensei
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LIKEI would kindly suggest looking into using an app yourself, the reasoning being you made simple mistakes such as not capitalizing the letter I. This makes me question how you ever passed first grade.Ps: This is a joke.
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skyfae:I would kindly suggest looking into using an app yourself, the reasoning being you made simple mistakes such as not capitalizing the letter I. This makes me question how you ever passed first grade.Ps: This is a joke.
GodaSensei:Thanks for the review :D. I will take it into account to make improvements