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Creativityiskey
CreativityiskeyLv141yr
2023-08-03 01:39

I have so much to say about this book but I’m not gonna type it all first author you need to break up your sentences they are so long you do not need to make it that long BREAK THEM UP(Did u not learn this in elementary or middle?) next is we don’t even knows what’s happening he just kills and boom he’s god at that point we get no description about what he looks like or where he is or even the monsters he’s fighting if anyone wants a quick summary of the book basically he dies kill sum that’s the whole story it’s stupid author needs to rewrite everything

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Kenitsu_Hiroshima
Kenitsu_HiroshimaAuthor

Oh Thank you for your advice

Creativityiskey
CreativityiskeyLv14

Author if you fix everything and I reread the story I will then give a better review!!

Kenitsu_Hiroshima:Oh Thank you for your advice
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