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Charming_liar
Charming_liarLv31yr
2023-07-29 20:19

The story itself is good, the male character is awesome, he manages with the little he has. The few things I noticed was that the paragraphs were a little bit long, the chapter lengths maybe try writing at least 1k words and above and that there is not much dialogues between the characters. Just change those few things I mentioned and this book will be awesome

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87 Chs

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By Order of the Yarl, you are to read this Book, donate your powerstones and become a fan no questions asked, you are dismissed. Shameless Author : BIG BAD WOLF

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Thank you guys for your support, I have finally signed a contract with Webnovel, your messages of motivation are what keeps me going hope you like my book

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Daoist8KBsZV
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Intrigued by the theme of reincarnation, I embarked on a literary journey like no other. From the very first pages, I found myself captivated, unable to break free from its allure. This novel has successfully hooked me, and I can't help but be drawn further into its depths. I eagerly await the unfolding of the story, as I sense an enthralling adventure ahead. Bravo to the author for crafting such an engaging tale that has me eager to stick around for more.

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DaoistKdzgax
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Good novel with great potential the writing improves every day the male lead seem's rational and doing he's best with what little he has, exited to see where this is going.

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MythBeast
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Very interesting novel Author writed it perfectly characters are wroted perfectly love your work keep writing excited to read more chapters 👍👍

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TheOtherNoble
TheOtherNobleLv4

Interesting idea with clearly defined characters. The author seems to have a plan, which is always a plus in a novel like this. The writing isn’t difficult to follow and the imagery is distinct in its style. Definitely give it a try!

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CasuallyPolite
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Choice of words is quite unique on this platform, but the format of paragraphs doesn’t suit the app because each para is too long… Just shorten them out and everything would be great with the writing. The them is generic, though immersive at the same time. I can tell that this book needs a little polishing in future chapters, and it would become a hidden gem in the future. Better yet, this might give plenty experience to the new author for future works down the line. Keep it up, author!

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greystorm1
greystorm1Lv4

lovely little story but still stuck at chapter 58 for months now, this review will be updated when our dear AUTHOR choses to start uploading. Also if you have any details that could be used to contact the author please share, i hope the lad hasn't gotten got.

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