Review Detail of Light_Breeze in Kyouhana: The Dark Lord's Bride Offering

Promising and unique plot, not your regular "transgrimated inside a novel" trope.The monologues of fl are well written.The backstory of each character was also expanded well.Here's what I think needs to be improved for this book to truly reach its potential -1) Tense - The grammar other than usage of tenses is pretty good. But in the same scene, sometimes even in the same para, there are two different tenses. Narration usually should be in past tense completely. Inner thoughts, monologues and dialogues being exceptions.2) Lack of Context Behind Behaviour - In a few scenes (like the one where the maid hugged the fl and sobbed) the body language of the characters are only described without giving any reason behind that. This left me confused at times3) Slow pace - This might not annoy everyone of course. But as an avid romance novel reader, I find it hard to get through the first few chapters without any scene from the Ml's povAs long as you work on these aspects slowly I am sure you would get better. Best wishes fellow author :)