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2023-08-27 05:40

Writing Quality: So loved the plotline, grammar, misuse of past and present tense, and wording errors, as well as sentence structure needs some work. I love the story development I just feel it's moving very fast in the beginning, and a few details are missing that could help clear a lot of confusion. I do however think this would make an amazing webcomic as is! Great job keep up the good work.

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So I decided to do a proper review unlike most of the others. Firstly, this feels like one of those shows that has a premise that you fall in love with but is ruined by the dialogue. You see, the author I believe (a bit of an assumption) hasn't wrote a lot of literature before this novel so there are quite a few grammatical errors which turns some whole segments into questionable gibberish that you need to decipher what's happening in the scene.Also, because if the lower quality writing, whenever the author tries a writing technique such as being vague, alluding to a topic or just simply omitting information that will be told later, you can't tell the intention and end up with the author seeming like he just ripped out the paragraph that was meant to explain the plot point.Although I seem to despise this novel, there are also many I aspects I love. Such as the pacing, the ideas(immaculate) and the characters and the different relationships they have and are going to have with eachother. But you see, the other messier parts can't just be ignored just because the story is built of a solid, sound base foundation. The intricacies are too jumbled up from the improper grammar and the quality is only enough for you to barely be able to follow the story. So in my unbiased opinion, this novel will be in the 'good' category if you don't mind grammar but if your enjoyment depends on details and the level of understanding in the different situations you read, you will perish whilst attempting to go through this. And to the author, keep on writing. Improvement will come with time and practice and this is a perfect opportunity for you to do that regardless of whether it's perfect right now. You can always come back and rewrite or correct the mistakes once your even better at writing.

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