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Vector_NeoLv21yr
2023-07-29 08:06

Everything seems good until now so do keep up the good work. I've liked it so far but I do hope Hermione isn't the FL. I feel like Luna or Daphne or even Fleur will go will with Alex's personality. Although Fleur will be my last choice.

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Ballad
BalladLv5

God same, i dislike Hermione she's so overused.

Trafford
TraffordLv6

Hopefully not she is one of my least favorite HP Female characters... while I admit that she was pretty intelligent, but that was her only quality, her attitude and know-it all / mildly arrogant behavior was something like Draco Malfoy with his "My father will hear this..."

Ballad:God same, i dislike Hermione she's so overused.
SERBMADHAUS
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Rolifps
RolifpsLv4

Trafford:Hopefully not she is one of my least favorite HP Female characters... while I admit that she was pretty intelligent, but that was her only quality, her attitude and know-it all / mildly arrogant behavior was something like Draco Malfoy with his "My father will hear this..."
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IINeeRoII
IINeeRoIILv1

A rather scattered fiction in reality. (Note that I only read up to chapter 30) - To summarize the protagonist: "I think of something difficult to do and I do it easily". -An important point is that the characters are not explicitly defined at any time, one must imagine how they are without including any description (Tip: this is a Harry Potter fic, which includes characters that grow while the school years go by and not here nothing is described). -In the first year it is only said that he gathers several books but his level of knowledge is not taken into account. Just creating that game should be a revolution for the wizarding world, as it includes: Mind and Consciousness Transference, runes, advanced wand lore (I think the game detects the owner's signature? or something similar), illusion, He transmits messages by means of the tablet (wouldn't this method replace owls?), advanced alchemy, transfiguration and then space magic (teleportation). -He is a protagonist capable of doing so many things and he is still in his first year, but nothing is explained, he just does it and one is left with so many doubts and questions. -His actions do not have any impact on the story, the characters only accept what he does, period. What are their reactions? What are the consequences of their actions? What is the real impact of your presence? Remember that just by existing everything should change. Example: The game he created giving experience not only to him, but also to his enemies (Keep in mind that just colliding with a person would change everything, like the domino effect). -Then there is the fact of saving Germioni and killing a troll as if he were crushing an ant. (Is he able to kill such strong creatures that fast at this point?) It's not explained... -The chapters are uploaded quite quickly from what I see so great. -There are grammatical errors but they are few. -The upload speed seems to be quite fast and regular. I hope this helps in some way, I will continue reading since it is not boring, in fact it is interesting, but still it has too many inconsistencies that it does not describe in the review [img=recommend]

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