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UNCHAINED_PREDATOR
UNCHAINED_PREDATORLv41yr
2023-08-09 18:59

This is peak, i love the story so far, the world building is a bit lacking but nothing too serious.

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Jaed21
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Author's Note: If I were to ever continue this, I would re-write it from scratch. The development of this fanfic did not quite work out as I wished to. I'm a bit ashamed of what's published and wish I could delete/hide it for a future re-writing, but I keep it around in this form since it's still decent and some people might want to read it, even if just for having Mordred. Keeping the comments for reference would also be useful to me. As it is, Mordred might seem like an Emilia simp, like some readeers pointed out. I don't thinks it's too bad, but I don't like the way it is also. As I came up with the idea of Mordred and Emilia actually being the pairing here, which wasn't the thing at the start, I thought of Mordred being more violent and rash as Mordred's spirit affects him, whereas both Mordred and Emilia would help each other grow (like when Mordred bursts into the loothouse and threatens everyone on first sight, but Emilia would want to negotiate first, calming him down), and it looked well in my mind at the time. But I removed these flaws from Mordred, making him more reasonable then the Heroic Spirit, so it turned into a pure one-sided help of Mordred to a foolish and useless half-elf, just like in the original. And Mordred choosing Emilia also came out quite suddenly with the current development, even though the reasons were good (her actual freaking OP powers and Mana, her potential and possibility of being related to Satella, even though she's naive and useless now). So, I'm not entirely proud of how the story turned out, but I'm leaving it here. To re-write, I would probably need to catch-up on hundreds of novel chapters of the original, but I don't feel like it right now. Honestly, I don't even like the Re:Zero verse that much. The main reason I chose it for a the background here was because the fantasy world and the magic system in Re Zero was so simple and basic that it made inserting a Fate character like Mordred very easy and fitting, and Mordred's abilities could be easily translated there.

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I‘m going to be honest this fanfic isn’t really exciting in the slightest bit but can be accounted to the fact that it’s still in its early so here are the it certain aspects of the story is does well in 1 Character Iteraction. The iteractions feel nice and genuine and not weird entirely though there are still awkward parts here and there. Comedy is great whenever Subaru is around so thatts a plus 2 This fic stays true to the original personalities of the cast members 3 Fight scenes described are near perfect though still lacking is to be expected And that’s pretty much where it ends for me now let’s list the negatives imo 1 One point I’ve seen in the reviews that I though was true was the fact that this story lacks meaning due to the fact it feels like it’s trying to replace Subaru with some added parts like Knight addition to the royal selection which I thought was ok but would’ve preferred if it wasn’t added and he just joined another camp though it ties in well wuth Mordreds backstory 2 The random affection Mc seems to just have obtained for Emilia in latest chapter 3 Subaru even being apart of the story like if Satella doesn’t love him whg was he even here. It just feels like a forced way to add him in for future purposes I’m ranting a bunch so I’m just gonna move away from negatives and add something else I wouldve preferred which is Subaru also gaining RbD and having their abibilities synced so they both return at the same time but that’s just me All in all it’s good but a feel things changed would be good

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