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2024-01-09 16:37

The writing is good and smooth. The story is a bit confusing. The second and third prologues are long and somehow add to my confusion. But when the story begins, things become clearer. The world background needs to be more explained. It is a multi-realm background and should be taken one by one to be understandable for readers. At first, many characters do many things in many places. Try to focus on the MC from the beginning and let her discover the realms by herself. The first prologue is a good start, but if the first chapter began with Luna, maybe it would be simpler and easier because I really had a hard time tracking the story. All the best.

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❤️Thank you so much! You're welcome with great joy! I hope you stay to enjoy Luna's journey between the two worlds and keep her in your library. Luna can't tell her story from the beginning because she is presented from birth [as it's important] so the story depicts her through the eyes of those around her until she reaches the age where she begins to discover and starts to grasp what she is living. ALSO, thank you for taking the time to review. Your feedback helps me a lot.❤️❤️❤️

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