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SpaceTimeMaster
SpaceTimeMasterLv311mth
2023-12-04 08:40

I didn't like it. Mostly because of the writing style. I found it cringy. You will find that the first couple chapters are insanely hard to get through mostly because of this one factor. Also, the story is very fast paced with almost no world building. The system also just gives the narrator explanations for free. I dropped it pretty early on and I probably won't come back if the narration doesn't get any better. Good idea just rushed and poorly executed.

Evolution begins with an ant colony

Zurbluris
3.9
398 Chs

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Kuroi_Lavendel
Kuroi_LavendelLv12

I don't think so This book is amazing!!!!!!

5mth
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Fenrir2883
Fenrir2883Lv4

one of the best novels I've read yet, keep up the good work.

1yr

Perfect_praize
Perfect_praizeLv3

This is the first time I am genuinely given a book a five star review after reading the first five chapters, no wonder this book won in the WPC JUL2023 Keep up the good work

1yr
Zurbluris
ZurblurisAuthor

Review made at chapter 194 Welcome to my personal and honest review of my novel, as well as a place where you can ask all your questions. There are some things I want to point out to new readers of this work, and I hope after reading this, you will be able to enjoy the novel as much as I enjoy writing it. Okay, let's go. Firstly, I want to admit that when I started writing this novel, I never really did a lot of research on ants, regrettably so. The time my protagonist spent as an ant was rather short, which upset many of my readers, causing them to drop the novel. I was more into fantasy novels where the monster protagonist ended up taking on an amazing human form, which greatly influenced me while writing this novel. I wanted my protagonist to be something similar in the hopes I could achieve the greatness I loved and idolized. Maybe if I could turn back time, I would have done better to meet all of your expectations. Partly, this was also my first successful attempt at writing a web novel. Secondly, the dialogues. Being as experienced as I am now, I fully understand and realize that dialogues are the major lifeblood of a novel. They entirely determine the direction of most of the novel, so it's not something you just write down without properly analyzing the right words to use in that moment. Regrettably, I didn't do such analysis, so the dialogues of the first couple of chapters may come off as cringy, but please bear with me. As I mentioned earlier, this was my first successful attempt at writing a web novel, so I was majorly inexperienced and unable to write something truly praiseworthy. However, it gets much better down the line, so try to bear with it. Thirdly, the storyline. Regrettably, the early chapters of this novel were penned down from sudden bursts of imagination and inspiration, so it seemed like the novel didn't have a clear direction. I fixed this around chapter 20 when I started to realize I couldn't come up with random chapters from my head and actually needed to plan everything. So hang in there until that chapter. Finally, something I'm proud of. I kind of love how I was able to not only improve all of the above but also the complexity. The novel comes off as a nice balance of evolution with a touch of Isekai fantasy, featuring battle, bloodshed, conquest. I love the way I've been able to somewhat give this world of mine a unique and intriguing history with a slight touch of mystery, tiny doses of revenge, retribution, and an excellent showcase of power. I love the way I've been able to slowly but surely craft out a personality for all of my characters—how my protagonist relates to them and the overall world-building. Although I can't go into the details because that would be giving spoilers, I can guarantee that if you try not to let the beginning stages of the novel bother you, you are in for a fairly good read.

12mth
Nightmare_Kaushik
Nightmare_KaushikLv12

Hey! man love the synopsis...I'll be shameless and say the starting part of my novel is also the same.I am a newbie author...love your novel Keep writing...

1yr
Vastoking
VastokingLv5

Okay, so I was sorta expecting something like Chrysalis but nothing makes sense in this novel it has potential but the author is sorta fumbling with the ideas like for example naming parts of the power system after species, its bound to be confusing though personally I understood it, the author doesnt seem to know what or how ants behave so this novel makes no sense now some ppl will be like this is fiction its not supposed to make sense but how are you supposed to enjoy the novel when ever so often you have to pause your read and smack your forehead on why stuff happens. Maybe I'm too particular or judgmental, also I have a problem with the fact mc gains a human form by just eating another ant. That's just rubbish. It has potential but if I were to compare this to something like Chrysalis it would a score over 100 ratio of 1:70 that's just how bad the first 10 or so chapters. i didn't read further but if i find the strength to read more and I start to like it, then I'll change the review. until the its 2.4 stars for me

1yr
Unholy_Bird
Unholy_BirdLv13

The grammar in the story is horrendous and could be greatly improved. The chapters had multiple miscapitalizations and wrongfully placed commas in many areas.

1yr
Di1
Di1Lv3

It's nice to meet another author from Nigeria

1yr
Tonye43
Tonye43Lv3

Interesting !!! very interesting I should say, I'm no perfectionist but I only find the story and concept interesting

1yr
Vladimir_1524
Vladimir_1524Lv13

I came for SL: Beru's Side Story, I got bottom tier isekai

1yr
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