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Ranzidd
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2023-07-06 12:33

Read around 140 chapters, different things to point out: Slow world/society building. Multiple perspectives. Large variety of niche characters and media you may or may not have heard of. MC is all over the place, sometimes competent other times incompetent. That being said if you like world building and colonization novels you'll probably like this, personally its a bit too slow for me who likes to see more individual progress rather than societal.

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Guy_Slade
Guy_SladeLv4

The quality of the writing. •The first hundred pages the quality is ok, not great but not bad, a decent number of things are spelt wrong, but the structure is medium to high. • The second batch of a hundred pages the quality is better but still not amazing, the spelling and structure has improved. • The third batch the spelling seems to be on point and the structure is now pretty good. The stability of the updates. •The number of updates at this current stage of reading (306) is high, as it is still in translation mode. •As the story here has yet to reach the current untranslated release I cannot speak to the future stability. The story. •The story starts off slow, but for a novel of length this is what you really want. •In the early chapters the story is a tale of the underdogs trying to boost their tech to be at least on par with the standard. •In the middle releases it is about growth. Growing the colony and personal growth of power of the MC, both of which are done in a rewarding and well paced fashion. •In the later releases it is now all about prepping for the coming galactic war. •In the future releases the story has implied that it will revolve around them trying to find themselves a place within the galactic empire, but that is a long way away from now and will remain to be seen. The character design. •The design of the authors own personal characters is done well, all of them, mc included, seem to be real people, and act and think in realistic ways. •The design of the characters imported from outside the starwars universe is done reasonably well, some of them are brought in to fill the gaps in certain rolls and not really heard from again, which makes sense considering. Some imported characters though are brought in and grown in an interesting yet authentic fashion which flows well with the story and their own expectations. •The design of the native starwars characters is decently done, in the places where changes have occured due to the mc on pre-established characters they are all done in a way which accounts for the traits of these characters, which the author even goes on to explain sometimes at the end of the chapters. World background. •It is Starwars with a hints Homeworld, Sins of the Solar Empire, Starcraft, EVE Online and more. I have tried to write this without putting any real spoilers in it, rather just highlighting the general direction so if someone does bother reading all of this, then it does not ruin anything. All in all I would recommend reading this, as it is decent so far, and how often do you come across a Starwars FF with this many chapters. Also, no harem, no system, weak to strong mc, video game elements, these are the most relevant tags I could think of putting in.

Iskarriot
IskarriotLv11

Review as of Chapter 700: It's a disappointing read. While the author does an excellent job of portraying the world of Star Wars with great attention to detail—from characters and locations to battleships and lore—the problems arise when it comes to the original content created by the author. These issues, while not significant on their own, collectively affect the story in a very negative way. Here are a few glaring issues: 1.The protagonist essentially forced his entire civilization into becoming military extremists based on a fabricated story about three calamities. 2.Cheap deus ex machina: making the protagonist Darth Plagueis' apprentice within 50 chapters, instead of a longer, more gradual plot. 3.The protagonist lacks a personality, appearing cartoonishly evil solely to represent his fall to the dark side. 4.Since the protagonist's faction is built on a lie, there is no genuine goal or greater purpose that would keep the reader engaged. 5.The government/faction created by the protagonist is, in some aspects, worse than Palpatine's empire. While this isn't inherently bad, coupled with the previous issue, the reader has no reason to care about or root for the protagonist and the success of his fledgling empire. 6. No real crisis for the Mc. The Clone Wars are based on Palpatine's secret identity. All Mc has to do is uncover it, and any danger disappears the moment Mace Windu cuts off Palpatine's head. With these problems combined, the plot falls apart for one simple reason: I stopped caring about the protagonist and his goals. The author may write 20 chapters of fierce space battles between the Republic and the Dawn, but I find myself skipping them because whether the Dawn wins or loses has no significance to me. Protagonist's Force grows stronger ? Who cares ? MC also ends up being the story's weakest link. He falls to the dark side before he could ever be likable, so both his fall and his actions afterward are boring at best. It's not helping that, as I mentioned earlier, the author makes his dark side cartoonish and edgy to the point where it almost becomes a parody of itself. The story would have been much better if the Mc were not a Force-sensitive person. Address the issue that most of the galactic wars were caused by Force users and their conflicting ideologies. Emphasize that both the Jedi and the Sith are extremists and unfit to lead any government. There was so much good stuff to explore, yet the author chose the most boring option. Not to mention, the author poorly balances personal power progression with kingdom-building. Imo author could have put a band aid on those problems by including chapters showing that the planets joining the Fourth Alliance were better governed than under the Republic. Early in the story, there were chapters showcasing these aspects when Planet Dawn was colonized, but after chapter 300 there are none.

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