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2023-07-27 00:09

Muah, so far this is perfection! The character interactions are by far the most realistic I‘ve ever seen and I’m loving the dynamic that the two main characters have! Not to mention the absolute absurd growth in power that comes from the combo of both their systems! And it’s like bringing common sense to cultivation, brilliant! The plot seems to be focusing on the development of the male protagonist’s city and I have actually thoroughly enjoyed it! There have only been few spelling errors as well, and the updates have been steady! Keep it up! This is by far my favorite original novel!

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I'm writing this review from my memory, I may make a couple of mistakes. Oh, and spoilers obviously For those that don't want to read, this is the tldr; writing quality; my grammar sucks, so I won't say much about it. World building sucks, update stability; almost every 2nd day or so The story development was good at chapter 1 and started to drop. Character Design; Shallow, horrible and scummy. Don't read if can't Handel losing your brain cell unless you turned it off. Writing Quality; there is nothing to say about this since I mostly ignore grammar mistakes or my mind corrects the mistake. Stability of Updates; Almost every second day or so. World Background; As a typical cultivation word set in a Xainxia genre, there certainly could go more in depth about this story and explain why and this work how the word is since its face pace, or it wasn't properly explained the world feels shallow. OK, now this is where the problem lies. Story Development this is your typical cultivation story with a bunch a cliché with young master, reincarnated and system. The problem here lies is not there are a bunch of clichés, but rather how it's used. The system is completely broken with broken rewards, for example, I remember there was a reward like the knowledge of The whole Earth, and it wasn't even used or explored properly, is the Knowledge of the whole human history from 21 or future human history and their science or is it the Knowledge of all life from an ant to a monkey live experience and there are a bunch of reward from anime and other story that was forgotten and wasn't push to its maximum like vibration quirk completely forgotten. Let's leave the system aside and move towards cultivation, there are a bunch of problems with this one they have never got in depth about cultivation, a story about it! Like how does the cultivation work, how does pill making work or formation array work the MC (male) is the best in Array much better than any immortal out there with about giving a way why and don't say, It's because he can fit so many array in the Tree in one of the chapter where his dad explain how he has never seen so much formation in an array, what I'm saying is why can't a bunch of IMMORTALS with all the time of the world cant do that. The other problem is how fast how the MC (male) dad manage to cultivate to void something level so fast! And let's not forget there are 2 MC both with system completely broken that would not make a good story, one does the work for you, the other is basically an infinite money printer, there is no difficulty in learning new cultivation scripture or the resource from the other system that is much worse used, the reward does not fit where you sign in, this is especially problematic first is the reward does not fit the location if you sign in at a temple you should expect to get something correlated to it and not some vibration quirk and the other problem is that you need to explore, and it could make a good adventure story with it, but the problem with cultivation is that every one want's to make a lazy sign in at home in one place without moving and without any exploration, this is one of the reasons that I dislike sign-in story so much wasted potential. The other problem I had is that the author does not know anything about city building nether do i, but I'm pretty sure I can make a better city them him in Sims city 4. Character Design; this is why I stop. The Character, sucks, sure it was fun and unique at the beginning of chapter 1, first the female MC feels pretty shallow as the chapter passes she went from someone relatable to irresponsible and ran away from home because of her grandpa after he became senile and instead of try to help him to get him back on his track after the grandma died or something she chose ran away and later can't for a life of make important decision without the other MC not I'm saying she should not rely on others, but she should not listen to everything the other MC says. The male MC is the reason why I stopped reading this, he went from quirky Incel to a *drumroll* scummy Incel twitch moderator * dan dan ta! At the beginning, he was fine, but at chapter 58 or something that where things changed, he was first a young master who collected a bunch a one - dimensional jade beauty trying to save them from poverty and scummy people who would sell them to slavery and do nothing to them, to then to making homless people sell their kids and train those kids into an Army, he thinks that his city should not have any homless people in them, so he used his cultivation like a dictator to kick them out and sell their kids to 'improve their lives and train in the army, since they don't deserve that' he also thinks that poor people are poor because they are lazy, and they do nothing productive, sure some are like that but this only applied to people in Europe it's a European way of thinking that if you are lazy don't expect you can improve your life, the problem here lies that in Eu or any underdeveloped society you can improve your life with just hard work, but that does not apply to poor country like in East Asia they are very hard-working they do that to survive, they can't become billionaire or live like lower earning income in rich country like in Switzerland for your apprenticeship you get paid 700FR. Monthly just for the first year, it's the bare minimum and 4000FR, when you are done with the apprenticeship, people like in India, it's about 200 us dollars this is our world modern world even in this one poor people in underdeveloped, society they don't get poor because they are lazy hack even in our world people get poor for many reasons, like your boss fired you or something happened in your life like your wife died, and you lost all meaning to continue to work there is no one reason some are just born in poor it's sad but true but even the poor just don't lie around and do nothing they have to keeping living because of many reasons like food water your family they are much tougher than people for modern society when there is a road block they do what it takes to keep living when your modern 18 years can't Handel is woke ideology being challenge and care too much about what other people think and start to scream when the first small trouble appear like a child that never grow up and only living in side his bubble. The MC thinks that kicking them out will resolve the problem and keep his city 'clean', that is wishful thinking, I would call it delusional, he has all the earth knowledge, let's say 21st century. He should know that kicking that out does not resolve the problem, that is why I said early that the Arthur just gave him op stuff without thought. The next problem is that he thinks they are all Evil since all of them are selling their kids just for gold and the gold he offers is fake gold, like pyrite. He did not think they just wanted a better life for their kids nor did he think that a slave trader, if that is even, a thing, would sell kids for that gold nor did he think what would happen if you separate a child from their family, and even worse he wants to train them for the military and gave those kids a lesson in saying something along this line 'if you don't want to end up like the so-called parent that sold you, then you have to work hard for a better life and stay loyal to me... oh and training starts tomorrow' he did not say that, but this is what I understood he, let's recap first he separate the family by making them sell their kids then train those kids in a military environment to serve him, what does he expect they would grow up as good loyal working-class citizen, let me tell you they become broken, sociopath that never learn love of a family and becomes emotionally dull or weak, he did not resolve the poor people problem, he separate family, and he made a ticking time boom of unstable human wow great job. Anyway, this is my take about the story. Have a lovely day. Reading_Knight out.

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