Review Detail of Someone_Or_Other in The Archmage of Sin

You had commas outside the quotation marks, your word order was all out of place - and inconsistently so - and your punctuation was either lacking or wrong in general. Add in stilted dialogue, inconsistent paragraph consolidation, and terrible flow that points to you not speaking English as a first language (which is fine, I don’t hold that against you and the fact that you can even write it badly is still impressive; I doubt I could write in your language even 1/10th as well) making it hard to read. But the kicker was the missing chunks of text. Like the part where you missed the whole system introduction - it skipped that part and jumped from what he was doing when it initialized straight to him finding a private area to check out the notifications. He even referenced it in his inner monologue. So I can’t help but wonder what else is missing; but at least having sections cut out explains some of the odd jumping around and terrible scene transitions. You got the review score I felt the novel deserved. Use grammarly, or even ChatGPT. Failing that, write it in your native language and MTL it and it would likely be better. Like I said, I admire the fact that you can even write in English at all, but I find it almost impossible to read with the lack of editing. You at least appear to have run spellcheck though.