Ok so I'm writing this from chapter 5Writing Quality: It's sadly very poor and I can barely get through a single sentence without having to think hard on what you wanted to insinuate. There are many errors where there are words that were used in the wrong context or were meant to be something else entirely.Story Development: It's a great premise and I find that the story is fairly interesting but my one gripe was the lack of history of the MCs previous world before it was blown up. We are basically thrown in the middle( or end) of what should be an extremely tense battle that feels more like a simple cakewalk.Character Design: Your character design is pretty good and but you may need a few more detail.Overall I think that you may want to revisit these older chapters because they are by far an annnoyance to read through causally for most and can lose you some potential readers on the first or second chapters.
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I think I will revisit the earlier chapters if I got time. As for her homeworld, that's our earth as we see it everyday. And for the progression of the story, I am pretty happy with it so far that's why I'm not going to add anything anymore. Thanks for the review. (๑•﹏•)
yeah sorry if I may have come off as harsh but I genuinely felt like the first few chapters were a struggle to go through and need some more love but other than that I will like to see what you come up with as soon as I'm caught up.😅
_OMNiCiENT_:I think I will revisit the earlier chapters if I got time. As for her homeworld, that's our earth as we see it everyday. And for the progression of the story, I am pretty happy with it so far that's why I'm not going to add anything anymore. Thanks for the review. (๑•﹏•)
