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redlady
redladyLv11yr
2023-06-30 22:33

The story is interesting as well the characters .I am sure that if you revise a bit more the grammar you will have a gorgeous book , ready to impress everyone who reads it ! Love it !

Mr Nightmare's Ex.

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4.5
16 Chs

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Rin_Nurnia
Rin_NurniaLv4

first things first, you need to fix the use of capital letters which usually can only be used in the very beginning of the sentences and after a full stop.

1yr

NewbieJimjim
NewbieJimjimLv3

The story possesses a fast-paced narrative, accompanied by straightforward descriptions, making it incredibly easy to read. However, there are minor issues with grammar and punctuation that could benefit from some correction. Nonetheless, the plot itself is refreshingly simple and holds great appeal for romance genre. The overall reading experience is enjoyable, and I hope you will keep up your good work!

1yr
ForerunnerOfSky
ForerunnerOfSkyLv3

I'm not a very big romance fan but this is pretty solid work, my major nitpick though is the grammatical errors. The story has a lot of potential and the ceiling is high for you as an author its a genuinely intriguing plot the major thing keeping me from fully enjoying it is some of the clunky writing. My advice to you is to read your own work every 5 or so chapters you'll catch quite a few errors and then you can update your chapter with better grammar for new readers.

1yr
Sie_Ryu
Sie_RyuLv2

Your story is great the plot is good and the characters are great as well, but the problem is the grammar, you probably get this a lot, but if you improve your grammar in writing I'm sure your novel will make it big someday. :D

1yr
TsukasaFrier
TsukasaFrierLv3

I've read a lot romance story including adult romance. As for your plot, I find it quite interesting so far. A very tiny issue is some of your writing has error where the words are joint together. Hopefully you always double check before published it. Keep up your good work!

1yr
OnlyShrimp
OnlyShrimpLv2

I'm not a fan of adult romance, but this one definitely interests me. I love every structure of dialogue and the interaction between the ML and Fl. Keep it up! I hope that the story will develop in the same way as the characters relationships!

1yr
femme_fatale
femme_fataleLv1

I really liked your book! There are just some little grammar mistakes. I can't wait to see Oliver and Mercy's relationship get better step by step! The story is really intriguing! And I hope you keep up the great work author-nim!

1yr
Emmanuelboss36_
Emmanuelboss36_Lv3

This is actually amazing, the flowing and descriptive writing style makes it easy to immerse yourself in the story. The premise is pretty unique and I still question the well built charecters motives. Can't wait to see thhe truth behind the situation in the prolouge cause everything seems pretty calm right now and wonder how it falls.

1yr
DubiousTone
DubiousToneLv3

Wow!! I loved it! The begining was so intriguing and fascinating. And the expression of the characters are on point👌This story is amazing! I'm looking forward to reading more !!!!!!!

1yr
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