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yunjun
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2023-06-29 11:38

Interesting start. I am curious about the mysterious girl's identity. A lot of worldbuilding can be seen, the author also did a good job in depicting the cruelty of war. The only thing I would like to point out is that dialogue tags are overused at times, but it improves in the later chapters. Overall, great job!

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TsukasaFrier
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Thank you so much for your review! I will continue to improve my writing.

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