Hello Everyone and Welcome to my first story! I for one think it's pretty good and that has nothing to do with the fact hat i wrote it [img=faceslap]. I've got some twists and turns planned for this story and im sure you guys will enjoy it. Or maybe you wont idk lol. But i hope you do!

the mc is killing it for me. like yeah I get he wasn't use to the supernatural but after seeing the sheer power gap between him and serafall he should've been putting in an effort. his sin isn't even pride it's wrath dudes a joke from the way he acted the entire time

I know some may not like what I'm about to say but I am going to say it. The first arc which is hogwarts was completely fine. It was understandable about what happened during it considering his inexperience and being just introduced to the supernatural, but after getting back there was no word saying he trained, used his family library, or asked his kin for advice on getting stronger. Then we get to his duel with Riser, I'm like alright he's throwing some cool sounding spells. But then when he's won Cao Cao stabs Riser in the back, then attempts to stab Jake only for Serafall to stab her top which insta-kills her. That is wrong on so many levels, now I was generous earlier with saying Cao Cao was at least Low Satan Class but in reality he can't be more than High to Peak Ultimate Class with his Balance Breaker would bring him to at most Mid Satan Class in power. Serafall could be killed if it was Balance Breaker, bit it wasn't so her death made no sense. So, this whole time jumping situation due to Serafalls death was not only forced, annoying, and infuriating, it was just stupid. Do you really think Sirzechs would just let Cao Cao attack his brother, even base form Sirzechs should be more than fast enough to reah Jake and block Cao Cao's attack.

Good writing quality, and an interesting start. The plot also seems pretty interesting so far. Sometimes it’s also nice to read about an original character that isn’t an all knowing self insert.

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5/1/3/3/4. Just look at infinite shadow's review. if you're too lazy to this is the basic take away; author "kills" off fleur only for her to be saved. author kills off serafall. full stop. also issei is genderbent, doesn't get added to mc's peerage(that he hasn't used since luna) and never bothers to learn or train. Many mistakes were made, mine being reading this. Hopefully these reviews will help prevent more mistakes from being made in the future. Does make me wonder if the author will as*pull out saving sera from death after being stabbed by the true longinus like some bull done after fleur got hit by the AK, the soul removing curse lolololol

Only problem I have is the chapters are very short, but it's a free book so 🤷‍♂️

hey i'm cao cao i'm 16 my spear is enough to beat serafall one of mao and i'm human by the way XD lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol

WQ:5 US:5 SD:4 CD:3 WB:3 WQ and US self-explanatory 5 stars. The chapters are longer than average too which is a plus. SD… it’s not bad at all. But sometimes for ‘comedy’s’ sake, author adds in odd scenes like with Draco fighting him off or those extra candidates in first task, which I honestly don’t find very amusing. But that may be a subjective thing. It just seems like the story should be a lot ‘bigger’ than it currently is. CD: The MC is… naive. It’s not something I personally enjoy in an MC. But I get that’s the character design. What is odd to me is the way Serafell and all the side characters act. Let’s not get started on the ‘Become 18 so we can date’ shenanigans which has 0 logic unless author is big braining and having Sera scheme against him, but like the MC has very little going for him for Sera to be interested anyway. How do I say this kindly… he’s a boring person imo. WB: I didn’t rate this one on how expansive the world is, but how lacking the story is in the small details (probably for the sake of comedy). Come on… let’s not even get started on Gringotts getting things checked before establishing odds, the fact that they went bankrupt? I don’t even know man. Economy is definitely not something taken into consideration while writing this, which is fine, but limits the WB score. A review made as of chapter 18- Duel? I’m dropping, but good luck author. It’s a decent story, just doesn’t tickle my b * lls the right way lol.