Review Detail of Jackoftrades in Danmachi: Shrouded in the Abyss of Darkness
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I’m going to go in depth and redoing this review. I will also preface this by saying I read up to chapter 20. This fanfic in my opinion is boring. I think this way because there is such a thing as over description. Everytime with how either the OC thinks or how they view the world it’s over described leading to longer paragraphs or multiple paragraphs where there is a lack of anything happening besides description. Where the story is in a standstill. Description is good but not when it drones on. Also from what I read this feels no different from any other OP OC in Danmachi the only difference is that the OC was added 800 years before canon to get to where he is. While the whole creepy male Yandere is different it almost feels less potent since he has been alive for so long. Also why say you are in a parallel world when everything seems the same especially when compared to other fics. I will say this is an easy fanfic to read in the sense that the grammar and spelling are top tier. If you enjoy it you enjoy it. I just personally don’t for the reasons I said above and more but my other reasons just have to do with the base of the story. I do hope you continue.
Danmachi: Shrouded in the Abyss of Darkness
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DeeplyLostInShadow:It's a fair review in my opinion mate, you just don't like my style! I hope you find a better novel to read <3image
I think the Author likes to pay attention to what matters based on the characters, as it was stated.Still, the parallel world is just obviously as stated:"The Gods behind Danmachi promoted the story by writing it out" -> It already happened in the "original world" while in this "Parallel World" time has yet to catch up. It's a natural explanation to me, but it felt different for you, for reasons I can't quite guess.
Well, I don't know man the fact that Eve's authority is space, time and destiny can't she just you know pop the mc at the start of the story? Also he feels repulsive at himself loving a pixelated character and creating a whole new world just for him because it's not his Ais but he's perfectly okay for a parallel one.
DarkMouth:I think the Author likes to pay attention to what matters based on the characters, as it was stated.Still, the parallel world is just obviously as stated:"The Gods behind Danmachi promoted the story by writing it out" -> It already happened in the "original world" while in this "Parallel World" time has yet to catch up. It's a natural explanation to me, but it felt different for you, for reasons I can't quite guess.