I read the first 11 chapters of your web novel and have some ideas. Overall I think it has potential, but there are a few areas that could be improved. First, I think you should be more enthusiastic about the topic you are writing about (I wrote more detailed). it would reflect in your words and make the story more engaging to the reader. Second, I think you need to develop your characters more. Right now, the main character doesn't seem to have much depth or personality. He just goes through the motions without really thinking about what he's doing. I think if you gave the character more of a backstory and motivation it would make it more relatable and interesting to the reader. Overall, I think your webnovel has potential, but it needs some work. If you can improve the writing style, character development, and pacing, I think you'll have a great story on your hands.
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Thanks for the advice. I'll keep it in mind. This is actually really helpful. Thanks for the support. (^_^)
What a sneaky commentor, they just want you to make either more chapters or longer chapters lol. +1 [img=recommend][img=update]
Support_Five:Thanks for the advice. I'll keep it in mind. This is actually really helpful. Thanks for the support. (^_^)
