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Hemanth_Chandra
Hemanth_ChandraLv31yr
2024-03-08 15:25

you see, although i love the whole idea, I hate making this luffy cry, which u are repeatedly doing , and also like come on, he is someone who went there till whitebeards and held his secrets somewhat good, but the first time he gave his name to navy he event told him he is nika or something. and also why do u tell him weak. he sure is luffyyyy but he is already hella strong ok, but still he waves his emotions like they are nothing even after all this time under their brothers , making him a goon or a dog on steroids. anyways, don't make luffy cry and all, which him getting all nika everywhere

The Return Of Joyboy!

TheIntrovertRin
4.5
93 Chs

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TheIntrovertRin
TheIntrovertRinAuthor

I like your insight! I'll discuss it with my co writer! Thank you so much!

1yr
Hemanth_Chandra
Hemanth_ChandraLv3

sorry man, just go on your own pace. I get that you are trying to write the ff different and all etc, but it's just that you have to maintain the pace at that.. too much negativity in small number of chapters on a lovable and joy giving character.... for no reason I am able to find is kinda off putting ... but still, do it at your own pace and I will still read it

1yr
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TheIntrovertRin
TheIntrovertRinAuthor

In case of any questions regarding the story or other issues, you are welcome to comment below. Ah by the way, it will be no harem!! Also, the story won't be dropped and if I do drop it, I'll message it clearly.

1yr

Deimesu
DeimesuLv4

Luffy being a Moana wannabe is killing me.

1yr
Royalmv
RoyalmvLv4

I have removed the whole fic as per as your request(you can check it yourself to confirm) sorry for the trouble and I apologize for my misdeeds ik I have been a shameless person to post a person's work without thier consent and I hope you can forgive me for my mistake

1yr
Yuki_978
Yuki_978Lv1

I love the idea of a Young Luffy, the child of Sea. It's awesome!!! Man this is so good, i cannot wait to see new chapters 😘✋ AND Let me tell you, this is awesome! Love the story, and oh the chaos luffy will bring. I wonder how marineford would go?

1yr
Flaiver
FlaiverLv4

I liked the story at the beginning, but it moves too slowly. I got to chapter 16 and the story is still about his childhood. At this rate, he will go to sea by chapter 50. The second thing that I didn’t like is, as for me, this is the secondary nature of everything that happens, I don’t know if it’s the case with me, but it’s like I’m reading an anime about life only with the One Piece theme. If you remove the water, I think 16 chapters will fit in 4-5 chapters. If not for the 2 problems that I described, I would put 5 but so 3.

1yr
R0B
R0BLv2

So boring and overated. We don't even have an mc. I don't want to read yet another fanfic that follows the story of one piece to a tea, but slightly diffrently. You will bore me to death.

1yr
Soul_Saiko
Soul_SaikoLv1

Sugoi! The chapter is so cool that I can't help but wait for more to keep coming. I really am falling in love with the story. It's as if like in each chapter there's something cool. I really love it. Plz keep writing. And also is it your theory about the original cannon?

1yr
Gamer_LAVI
Gamer_LAVILv4

Good story with luffy being nika and all man can't find any good nika fics if u guys can suggest

1yr
Drimy
DrimyLv4

Reveal spoiler

1yr
Ayush_Rai_6153
Ayush_Rai_6153Lv4

is it dropped ? h

1yr
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