The 1st & 2nd volumes are top notch, but the story got a little worst in the 3rd as the pacing got butchered and sometimes it feels like the story is going nowhere. There are some pointless conversations with secondary characters and that affects the seriousness of the plot. While I like Luis as a MC, it feels like he is in control of everything all the time and that blocks the surprise element within the story. The romance is really good, and Alicia have shown growth in the personal aspect, but I feel like her and other characters growth have been hindered regarding leadership and decision making. The over explanation of feelings for all characters gets exhausting over time. The story have so much potential and I hope it gets more action and mystery over time. Thanks for your work, Author. I will keep following the story.
Liked by 3 people
LIKE
Thanks for your review. Yes, I agree I messed up the story's pace in volume 3. Especially, that mission arc. It was only later that I found that I could have skipped a lot of dialogues, which were not necessary. For the surprise element, I can only say that no matter how cautious a person is. Sometimes unexpected things are bound to happen. Alicia's growth will be there in those aspects over time. Over explanation of feelings... Sigh... It is indeed my fault that sometimes I get too in-depth. I'll try to improve on that. I hope you enjoy the story, regardless of my lack of experience.
Regarding the Over explanation of feelings, it wasn’t like that in the first 2 volumes. Read the Interview chapter after the school entrance exam and the interaction with the senior, for example. The thoughts and frases were a lot more concise. Keep the good work, thank you for it
Yeah, I read it as you said. The interactions with the side characters were a little too much in the 3rd volume, which ruined the pace. From now on, I'll try to be concise and on point to limit the interactions. Please, tell me your thoughts after reading the next few chapters that I upload.
