Review Detail of Donabuis_Cronus in The war never ended
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Thank you I didn’t know that actually mattered thank you and will do I genuin appreciate the advice and the time you took to read it
Omny1928:A suggestion to make it easier to read is break up the paragraphs with line spaces after most of the periods. Example: A car sped down the freeway weaving through the battlefield of cars and escaping the police’s attempts at capturing the felon. Suddenly a burst of white appears as a truck, going the wrong way head-on collideswith the speeding car transporting the criminal to another world. Compared to this A car sped down the freeway weaving through the battlefield of cars and escaping the police’s attempts at capturing the felon. Suddenly a burst of white appears as a truck, going the wrong way head-on collideswith the speeding car transporting the criminal to another world. Chunking the sentences out makes it easier to read not even mentioning that this is a small example not 1k+ words like in your chapters So consider this in future chapters!
A suggestion to make it easier to read is break up the paragraphs with line spaces after most of the periods. Example: A car sped down the freeway weaving through the battlefield of cars and escaping the police’s attempts at capturing the felon. Suddenly a burst of white appears as a truck, going the wrong way head-on collideswith the speeding car transporting the criminal to another world. Compared to this A car sped down the freeway weaving through the battlefield of cars and escaping the police’s attempts at capturing the felon. Suddenly a burst of white appears as a truck, going the wrong way head-on collideswith the speeding car transporting the criminal to another world. Chunking the sentences out makes it easier to read not even mentioning that this is a small example not 1k+ words like in your chapters So consider this in future chapters!
Donabuis_Cronus:Thank you I didn’t know that actually mattered thank you and will do I genuin appreciate the advice and the time you took to read it