Review Detail of Irlandez in Reborn in Danmachi as a dragon kin
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If you were wondering why people hate your mc, it's because he was a twenty-four-year-old college student acting like a fourteen-year-old, maybe even younger. I'm not about to start with that paper cut-out harem of your mc yet. Let's go into his race as a dragonkin. That should have been easy if you couldn't think of anything traits for their race, you could have just copied the characteristics of the first-gen dragon slayer from fairy tail, but more parasitic since dragons are only monsters in Danmachi with a twist his race have a connection too the black dragon. Let's talk about the following problem of the mc. Why is he a Gary Stu? I wait till you answer for my feedback on this one. Lastly, the harem. Do you know why a lot of people don't like harem or say make it realistic? It is not because a female or a male with multiple partners is real; It's because only a few people know how to make them right without becoming two-dimensional. To help with this, put a few chapters with just the harem to flesh them out more. As for your score, I give you a 3.2
Reborn in Danmachi as a dragon kin
HungryMushroom
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Thanks to this conversation I realized what kind of person the author is, thank you very much, I will not waste my time reading garbage.
Irlandez:Ok, I reread my first comment. I won't lie to you; I could find nothing wrong with it. I had to reread it six times to see the problem with what I said the first time. So yea, my constructive criticism came off as destructive and censure.
Sigh, what a garbage review to make. I am tired of people saying the mc is immature. If you don’t like it stop reading. Complaining about a harem that i haven’t really started is even more ridiculous. I only mentioned that he made a confession to Hephaestus and Bahamut and nothing else but somehow it’s one dimensional. Those two are the only confirmed members and I haven’t even begun expanding on that. Mc isn’t even perfect in anyway. I decide how a dragon kin in Danmachi should act like and if you don’t like it then leave. Thanks for trying the novel goodbye.
Ok, One, did I say it was a bad story or complete trash on it. No, I have given you my opinions and idea so far. I like the story. It is entertaining, even with its flaws. Two, as for the harem, I know you didn't start it yet; that's why I told you a tip so the quality of your story with the future harem would not be horrible like I saw ruin so many other good stories. Lastly, garbage review? If anything, mine is one of the few genuine ones. Instead of giving you five stars, say it's great, or give you one for something minor I didn't like in the story. I took my time to provide an honest review and offered constructive criticism about your character and an idea even if you didn't use it.
HungryMushroom:Sigh, what a garbage review to make. I am tired of people saying the mc is immature. If you don’t like it stop reading. Complaining about a harem that i haven’t really started is even more ridiculous. I only mentioned that he made a confession to Hephaestus and Bahamut and nothing else but somehow it’s one dimensional. Those two are the only confirmed members and I haven’t even begun expanding on that. Mc isn’t even perfect in anyway. I decide how a dragon kin in Danmachi should act like and if you don’t like it then leave. Thanks for trying the novel goodbye.
Also, you still did not answer my question from the first comment I gave you: whether your main character will be a Gray Stu or not.
HungryMushroom:Sigh, what a garbage review to make. I am tired of people saying the mc is immature. If you don’t like it stop reading. Complaining about a harem that i haven’t really started is even more ridiculous. I only mentioned that he made a confession to Hephaestus and Bahamut and nothing else but somehow it’s one dimensional. Those two are the only confirmed members and I haven’t even begun expanding on that. Mc isn’t even perfect in anyway. I decide how a dragon kin in Danmachi should act like and if you don’t like it then leave. Thanks for trying the novel goodbye.
Reread your first comment and compare it to your reply and if you still feel that it sounds right then I have nothing left to say.
Irlandez:Ok, One, did I say it was a bad story or complete trash on it. No, I have given you my opinions and idea so far. I like the story. It is entertaining, even with its flaws. Two, as for the harem, I know you didn't start it yet; that's why I told you a tip so the quality of your story with the future harem would not be horrible like I saw ruin so many other good stories. Lastly, garbage review? If anything, mine is one of the few genuine ones. Instead of giving you five stars, say it's great, or give you one for something minor I didn't like in the story. I took my time to provide an honest review and offered constructive criticism about your character and an idea even if you didn't use it.
Ok, I reread my first comment. I won't lie to you; I could find nothing wrong with it. I had to reread it six times to see the problem with what I said the first time. So yea, my constructive criticism came off as destructive and censure.
HungryMushroom:Reread your first comment and compare it to your reply and if you still feel that it sounds right then I have nothing left to say.
Eltoxico69:Thanks to this conversation I realized what kind of person the author is, thank you very much, I will not waste my time reading garbage.