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Brian70707
Brian70707Lv151yr
2023-08-06 20:55

dropped chapter 3 not enough for accurate review however author goes from 1 to 100instead of building characters to illustrate why something is just states that it is (bad writing )interactions go same way instead of explaining why he is "loved" by everyone in family (in such a kingdom not possible ) just states that it ishas a book for the system so not actually a system ( bad writing )

Kingdom Building Done Right!

Elyon
4.1
100 Chs

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Elyon
ElyonLv15

I would like to inform everyone that this story is a collaboration work with another author. If you look at the book cover, you will see that the author name is "I Am Not Elyon". it means that I am not the one that wrote this story. However, the Core Elements, as well as the plot of the story is something that came from me. If you find the story lacking, please have more patience because my collaborator is just starting to refine her writing skills (Yes, she is a girl). I believe that in the future, she will do this story justice, so until then, I wish that you guys will give this story a chance, and see how Kingdom Building is Done Right!

1yr

Lordyyy
LordyyyLv3

Author-san, why must you torture me? Why? Sigh... so many sighs... what can I do, I must read now, even though I've your other stuff piling up for a while...

1yr
Pragmatico
PragmaticoLv15

Read the free chapters for a reference point: So the grammar is 5 stars compared to 99% of the stories on here. The basic premise of the story is also good and a genre I like reading but hard to find. There is a huge oversight on the world building though. There is a level system but no details have been given about it. What level is the MC? What does higher levels entail? Where is the MC we know what kingdom but is he in the North, South, West, or East? Where are the other nations/ empires mentioned in comparison to MCs location? MC also lacks character building and I didn’t get attached to him in these chapters or even feel like I can sympathize with him; at least not yet anyways. I wish you luck with your story though hopefully you will keep at it and make it better as it goes, good luck.

1yr
The_Procrastinator
The_ProcrastinatorLv4

Reveal spoiler

1yr
T_Tan
T_TanLv4

I am a reader of strongest necromancer of heaven gate, so i expect this novel to be good too. But now i read up to the latest chapter (42) and i feel like this book isn't written by Elyon, its just feels different for me, like something written by a newbie author. The start of the chapter when mc got exiled feel emotionless, but for me the worst part of the story is, chapter 22 suddenly there is Level and Skill ! to make it worse, there is no explanation about them even in chapter 42. The world background is below average imo, considering mc is reincarnated from another world. I can understand if we lack information about the world after 42 chapter if the mc is recently summoned to this world, but he became a prince here since baby... overall, its still a fun read, just below my expectation for elyon.

1yr
Westley_Vidrine
Westley_VidrineLv15

Oh dear me, I only just finished RWTSS and now I need to catch up on two of these wonderful books? In that case, take my money!!! Great characters so far. Easy to get lost in. Very good book so far! Looking forward to the story this will play out to be! *Warning!* As with all Elyon books, getting addicted to it is highly possible.

1yr
Lord_Belly
Lord_BellyLv15

Though the book currently only has 100 chapters, from what I have read so far, it seems to me this book is rather interesting and enjoyable. I hope to see more chapters of it in the future.

1yr
blac
blacLv15

good please check it out I do recommend this 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

1yr
AllaroundBaka
AllaroundBakaLv13

Finally! a novel that has my Favorite genre! KINGDOM BUILDING

1yr
KarLo13420
KarLo13420Lv4

could have been so much better if not for the system ufjfigigufufufufuvugugigiguguvugigugugugugugugucugufugigifjgigugufyryetsydufyfyfyfufufuf

1yr
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