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2023-06-14 22:37

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KnightInArmor
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SOMEONE HELP THIS GUY HE LOST SOME BRAIN CELLS!!!!

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SlothBYnature
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Absolutely awful, strong is nonsensical and not in a fun way and the mc is deranged but also not in a fun way, let's start with.writing quality- the quality is readable but often sentences repeat or are extremely stilted and out of character, I got through a few chapters and again it's readable but that is not anywhere near the standard that should be set.Story- it starts off interesting but tacky and after a few chapters take a major nose dive (spoilers if you still plan on reading) ..... the mc trys to avoid attention by cutting personal ties and hiding in the background, yet when another kid threatens to reveal that he's been heading to the forest to train if he doesn't fight, the mc leads him on a chase into a deep forest and kills him, it is so abrupt and out of nowhere for the mc that it caught me so off guard I had to take a second to think about what I just read, the mc has actively tried to seem so unimportant to the world around him but suddenly decides murder was the best way to hide a 'secret' that he stated was most likely known by the hokage, and what was this secret training? he would spend the night jogging and swimming... stupid.character design- not only is the mc an out of nowhere psycho but his personality flip flops from being disinterested, to scheming to even concerned with someone he has purposefully distanced himself from, the other characters are out of character but I could let some of that slide, such as kushina isn't abrasive or passive agressive, but instead soft and determined to help the 'autistic' main character. at times its bearable but not worth sticking with after everything else.updating stability- can't say much as I had to drop after a few chapters.world background- the world is just a cliché cynical konoha that takes advantage of the weak, and with the mc changing the plot within the third or fourth chapter thing are almost guaranteed to be different, but who knows the author has show that he's more than willing to flip flop on his story so anything could change.all in all if you want to read this just know that the story most likely gets worse from where I stopped, if it doesn't then congrats on sticking through just don't get your hopes up.

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